TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

Both the article and the lecture are Discussing one of Rembrandt's painting. The article states that the painting is not actually done by Rembrandt, and provides three reasons for support. However the professor believes that the painting was made by Rembrandt and casts doubt on the claims made in the reading.

First, the reading states that the woman in the painting was wearing fur coat which inconsistent with the whole theme of the picture, since she is appearantly a servant. The professor, however, refutes this point, she says that fur coat, indeed, was sdded by another painter after many years in order to make the girl in the picture looks like an aristocratic lady and rise the value of the portray.

Second, the article claims that while Rembrand was expert and he mastered the shadow and light technic on his paints, this picture acually showed a major mistakes. This point was argued by the peofessor, she states that in the the original depict the illumination of the women face was correct but after the addition of the coat , so, if the caot is removed, we can see the normal consistency between orginal dress and the illumination of the women face.

Finally, the reading posits that the wood in the back of the painting is consist of multiple pieces of woods that glued together and this thing is unusual in the other Rmberdant's paintings. The professor, nonetheless, rebute this point, she states that the original painting was made in single piece of wood just like his other paintings and the pieces of wood was added later on, similar to the coat to make the painting more precious.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le and the lecture are Discussing one of Rembrandts painting. The article states ...
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Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...and provides three reasons for support. However the professor believes that the paintin...
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Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...aristocratic lady and rise the value of the portray. Second, the article claims that wh...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tray. Second, the article claims that while Rembrand was expert and he mastere...
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Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ed by the peofessor, she states that in the the original depict the illumination of the...
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Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ed by the peofessor, she states that in the the original depict the illumination of the...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rrect but after the addition of the coat , so, if the caot is removed, we can see ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...nd the illumination of the women face. Finally, the reading posits that the woo...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
...the wood in the back of the painting is consist of multiple pieces of woods that glued ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, look, nonetheless, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84420289855 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44580508041 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536231884058 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.237647239 49.2860985944 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.555555556 110.228320801 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6666666667 21.698381199 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385760515797 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162666684814 0.0996497079465 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746732845953 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221610231878 0.162205337803 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769829386787 0.0443174109184 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.3589403974 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 53.8541721854 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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