TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rembrandt.
The passage and lecture are both about Rembrandt’s work which is the portrait of an elderly woman in a white bonnet. The passage illustrates some points that it’s not his genuine work, while the lecture opposes the passage’s points to prove and provide with some explanation to show that the portrait is really his work.
Firstly, The passage explains the first mistake that appears in the portrait which is a woman’s dress like a fur collar. It does not go with her and It is not a thing that her career couldn’t afford. And He was well known for his attention to clothing detail, But the lecture refutes by analyzing and an x-ray of this portrait show that fur collar had been added before the painting was made for a hundred year by someone. It is probably because of increasing its value for sale.
Secondly, the article shows the second error which is light and shadow of this painting. Her face should be reflected with partial shadow due to having on dark fur collar which would rather absorb the light than reflect. While the lecture opposes that his work was based on reality and she gave the explanation that its original was a woman wearing a simple collar and light cloth So it is the reason why the partial shadow didn’t appear.
Finally, The passage posits that he often painted with a wood panel, but there is no his work which used the way which it was made of a variety wood’s piece, while the lecture argues that he used it with the fur collar to aggrandize its look and value of painting and the researcher found that the piece of wood, which used in his other works came from the same tree.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that the portrait is really his work. Firstly, The passage explains the first ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65529010239 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43682182741 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508532423208 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.9155715102 49.2860985944 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.4 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3 21.698381199 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350343146705 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127369971314 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793072975254 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201530495707 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603335209545 0.0443174109184 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 11.0289183223 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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