TPO-09 - Integrated Writing Task Car manufacturers and governments have been eagerly seeking a replacement for the automobile's main source of power, the internal-combustion engine. By far the most promising alternative source of energy for cars is the hy

The passage claims that the hydrogen-based fuel cell engine capable to replace the internal-combustion engine. Furthermore, the author states that it is the most promising sources to powers the car further. The hydrogen-based fuel engine has several advantages over the petroleum or diesel engine. However, the professor refutes the idea because she believes that the the replacement not correct the problem and stated that the author way too optimistic. She exonerates three reasons to contradict the author claim.

First, the reading avers that the hydrogen is more easily available than the petroleum or diesel fuel because they are infinite source of energy unlike the natural resources. Whereas the lecturer states that, this is not always correct. Although the hydrogen exists in the extensive number, it cannot directly use. The hydrogen needs to transform into a liquid form. The process to produce the liquid form is very involved process and need an advance technology. Additionally, the process to storage the hydrogen is quite troublesome; they need to be store in minus 30-degree Celsius. Therefore, it is not very advantageous as stated by the passage.

Second, the author posits that the hydrogen may lessen the pollution. Regardless that the hydrogen based fuel engine only produces water, the factory that produce the liquid hydrogen doesn’t. The professor elaborate more about this topic by stated that the purification of hydrogen is facilitated by coal and oil. Even though the car not produce pollution, the factory does.

Lastly, the passage states that the hydrogen is economically competitive in comparison of the internal combustion one. The author support the idea by states that the hydrogen is twice efficient that the latter. However, the professor refutes the idea by claim that to make the hydrogen usable it is need platinum. Platinum is very expensive and rare material. It is used to help the hydrogen undergo the chemical reaction. Until now, the platinum is irreplaceable. That is why the hydrogen may not as efficient as the author claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sons to contradict the author claim. First, the reading avers that the hydrog...
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...antageous as stated by the passage. Second, the author posits that the hydro...
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...produce pollution, the factory does. Lastly, the passage states that the hydr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, second, so, therefore, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1373.03311258 128% => OK
No of words: 330.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33939393939 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86086285442 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493939393939 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 16.0 8.23620309051 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4100701838 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6086956522 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.347826087 21.698381199 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 7.06452816374 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315234313791 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883951236783 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109293911567 0.0662205650399 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19394050283 0.162205337803 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087463803368 0.0443174109184 197% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.1 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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