TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task
Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she looked like. For a long time, the only accepted image of Austen was an amateur sketch of an adult Austen made by her sister Cassandra. However recently a professionally painted, full-length portrait of a teenage girl owned by a member of the Austen family has come up for sale. Although the professional painting is not titled Jane Austen, there are good reasons to believe she is the subject.
First, in 1882, several decades after Austen's death, Austen's family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. Austen's family clearly recognized it as a portrait of the author. So, for over a century now, the Austen family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen.
Second, the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in Cassandra's sketch, which we know depicts Austen. Though somewhat amateurish, the sketch communicates definite details about Austen's face. Even though the Cassandra sketch is of an adult Jane Austen, the features are still similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting. The eyebrows, nose, mouth, and overall shape of the face are very much like those in the full-length portrait.
Third, although the painting is unsigned and undated, there is evidence that it was painted when Austen was a teenager. The style links it to Ozias Humphrey, a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire. Humphrey was active in the late 1780s and early 1790s, exactly the period when Jane Austen was the age of the girl in the painting.
The reading passage gives three reasons to illustrate the recently released teenage girl portrait is jane Austen. however, the professor in the lecture casts his doubts against the reasons.
First, the passage asserts that Austen's family permitted the use of the teenage girl portrait as an illustration of Jane Austen. however, the professor is convinced that the permission was given 70 years after Austen's death, and the family members who gave the permission would have never seen Austen in person and it is not certain if it was her.
Second, the Austens is a large family. there could be Jane's cousins or other children in the family who resembled jane. there was an assumption that the portrait may illustrate a child called Mary, who was Jane's nephew. therefore, the similar face couldn't guarantee that it depicted young jane.
Third, according to the lecturer, it is only the painting style that links to Ozias Humphrey. it was only when Jane was 27 years old was the canvas used for the girl portrait being sold. therefore, when the canvas was available for painting the young girl, Jane had been much older, which contradicts with the reading material.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
...d teenage girl portrait is jane Austen. however, the professor in the lecture casts his...
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Suggestion: However
...rait as an illustration of Jane Austen. however, the professor is convinced that the pe...
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Suggestion: There
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Suggestion: There
...ldren in the family who resembled jane. there was an assumption that the portrait may...
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Suggestion: Therefore
...hild called Mary, who was Janes nephew. therefore, the similar face couldnt guarantee tha...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...nes nephew. therefore, the similar face couldnt guarantee that it depicted young jane. ...
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Suggestion: It
...ing style that links to Ozias Humphrey. it was only when Jane was 27 years old was...
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Suggestion: Therefore
... used for the girl portrait being sold. therefore, when the canvas was available for pain...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 30.3222958057 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 984.0 1373.03311258 72% => OK
No of words: 195.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04615384615 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40147883433 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579487179487 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 419.366225166 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6284940295 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4545454545 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 7.06452816374 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518845102246 0.272083759551 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191225323556 0.0996497079465 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124158470403 0.0662205650399 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310559109583 0.162205337803 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112613360723 0.0443174109184 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.