tpo51--Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
movies and television play important roles in the lives of many people. However, when it comes to young people, the effects of movies and television are usually more negative than positive because they promote violence and laziness.
Visual media today is simply too violent for young people. because of this violence, the young are taught that fighting and guns are solutions to their problems, and some of them may actually take similar violent actions themselves. they are too young to differentiate between the fiction of tv and movies and the reality of their lives. Furthermore, young people become desensitized to violence because it is all over television and movies.
one example is the increase of violence at my school over the past few years. one of my teachers told us that when she started working at the school, there were hardly ever an fights. Yet today, there are more and more of them. she believes the reason for these fights is the excessive violence students see in movies and on television. it is obvious that they have negative effects on young people when it comes to violence.
Another negative effect movies, and especially television, have on young people is that they make children and teens lazy. young people watch too much television instead of doing other activities like their homework or interacting with their families. In fact, these days, many articles on the Internet discuss how people watching too much television is one of the major causes of this situation. students are spending more time in front of their tv than they are reading books or doing their homework, and their grades are suffering from it. If they continue with this situation, they will not perform well in their jobs later in their lives, and they will lack the motivation to improve their lives. Clearly, tv and movies are making young people much less diligent.
In conclusion, movies and television have negative effects on young people today because children and teens often imitate the violence they view and they simply spend too much time watching television instead of focusing on their studies. watching fewer movies and tv programs would probably have a more positive impact on young people in general these days.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05107526882 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40908663282 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481182795699 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6912436982 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8947368421 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33764861902 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122962517161 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109897063219 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232023527545 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944401452717 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.