some young adult want independence from their parents as soon as possible. other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. which of this situations do you think is better?
Becoming an adult is a really special time in anybody’s life and the call to head out into the world and embrace our independence is, for many people, quite powerful. I think this can depend on a lot of factors; for example, somebody starting a job might have different needs and priorities compared to a person who intends to go on and study at university. Generally speaking, I believe that it is better for all concerned if young adults continue to live with their families for a longer time, particularly if they are going to be studying at university or something similar.
First of all, it’s important to consider finances. Certainly, it is possible for some young adults to get work and support themselves relatively quickly. However, in most part of the world, these days it costs a lot to rent a house, attend university, buy a car or purchase things like health insurance. By way of example, I can recall trying to live independently outside the family home as a university student and I constantly struggle to pay bills and meet all the other costs of living as a young adult. This in turn had adverse effects for things like my study performance.
Hence, in addition to the significance of finances, I think this is better for a young adult’s study potential. With your family’s support, it is a lot easier to focus on your studies. Of course, for some people in some situations, the family situation may actually be quite distracting or stressful. However, I think it would be fair to say that you are more likely to eat better meals, have a quiet place to do schoolwork, and get a decent night’s sleep if you happen to be living in the family home. I can recall a friend from my university days who lived in a shared house with other students. Life was a party for him but he didn’t eat or study well and inevitably his grades suffered. He had to repeat several subjects and finished his degree later than many of his peers.
Finally, staying at home with one’s parents doesn’t necessarily mean that a young adult cannot develop independence. I’ll be the first to admit that there are parents out there who struggle to adknowledge that their children have grown up and deserve treatment as adults; it’s instinctive in many of them to continue to play a mothering role that can actually be quite stiffling for a young adult. Despite this possibility, even though I spent most of my university days living with my parents, they respected me as an adult as well as their child adn they didn’t attempt to interfere too much or limit my independence. I think this is the case for many other young people as well. So I don’t think it is necessarily fair to claim that just because someone is living with the family, they are somehow unable to enjoy benefits of independence. In fact, I believe the safe environment of the family is a good place to handle transition to adulthood for all concerned, both the child and the parents.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored aboved, I’m of the opinion that in most cases, it’s actually more beneficial for most adults to continue living with their parents for a longer period of time. Families are precious things and an essential part of the fabric of a nurturing society. So I have a strong belief that they can be a powerful guide in helping children negociate the path to independence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, of course, as well as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2844.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 596.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77181208054 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83885874228 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48322147651 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 906.3 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5945524287 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367944788801 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103918335118 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833593783285 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219414823744 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345279283738 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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