TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading passage suggests that the business of selling fossils is harmful to both the scientist and the general public. However, the lecturer cast doubt on each idea of the author.

First and foremost, the article states that because of many wealthy commercial collectors, the fossils are out of public eye which causes the decline of public interest. On the other hand, the lecturer rejected this point by saying that the commercial markets have a lot of fossils for purchase which makes the price of fossils affordable for everyone. As a result, the public schools and other institutions eligible to buy fossils and put them to the public eye which will probably increase the interest of people.

Secondly, the reading indicates the buyers may destroy the crucial discoveries about the extinct animals just keeping it away from the scientist. In contrast, the professor argued that the fossils must be pass through the hand of a scientist before it sold on a commercial market. According to her, the markets and buyers cannot determine the fossils without the help of scientist.

Finally, the passage claims that the most commercial fossil collectors damage the valuable evidence for the scientist to get an experience more about the fossils such as the to locate the area which the extinct animals live. Nonetheless, the lecturer made a counterclaim to the idea by saying there are not enough fossils to get a right data and information about those animals, so, the only fossil could not damage the work of the scientist.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...s harmful to both the scientist and the general public. However, the lecturer cast doubt on ea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, in contrast, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1283.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05118110236 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56950320192 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53937007874 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1004157986 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.3 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 7.06452816374 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.502918518147 0.272083759551 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196840612013 0.0996497079465 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928201379253 0.0662205650399 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285837924623 0.162205337803 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804785803843 0.0443174109184 182% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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