TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task
In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for birds, these trends are likely to continue, with the result that the number of birds in the United States will necessarily decline.
First, as human populations and settlements continue to expand, birds' natural habitats will continue to disappear. Forests, wetlands, and grasslands will give way to ever more homes, malls, and offices. As the traditional areas suitable for birds keep decreasing, so will the size of the bird populations that depend on those vanishing habitats.
Second, agricultural activities must increase to keep pace with the growing human population. The growth of agriculture will also result in the further destruction of bird habitats as more and more wilderness areas are converted to agricultural use. As a result, bird populations in rural areas will continue to decline.
Third, as human settlements expand and agriculture increases, the use ofchemical pesticides will also increase. Pesticides are poisons designed to kill agricultural and home garden pests, such as insects, but inevitably, pesticides get into the water and into the food chain for birds where they can harm birds. Birds that eat the poisoned insects or drink contaminated water can die as a result, and even if pesticides do not kill birds outright, they can prevent them from reproducing successfully. So pesticides have significantly contributed to declines in bird population, and because there will continue to be a need to control agricultural pests in the future, this decline will continue.
In the topic, the author represents an argument by giving different points that how because of increase of human population, farming methods and urbanization, destroy bird’s natural habitats and there is a uniform decline in their population. And in the lecture, the speaker counters the argument by saying the points are unconvincing.
The first point the author represents that human’s settlement and increase in population majorly destroy birds’ population. As human builts more homes, malls, and offices, they cut down more forests and that desultory of suitable areas for birds. The speaker though opposes the idea by saying; the argument is not actually true. There is a growth of the bird’s population because of urbanization, as urbanization provides more suitable places for birds. There is an increase in a population of sea eagles and pigeons and also the population of hawks. So, the point in the text is totally unconvincing.
The second argument that the author gave that due to increases in human population more areas used as farming and wild areas were destroyed. This farming method destroys habitats of birds. The speaker counters the point by saying, in reality, in the United State fewer lands are used as a farmland. Peoples used more scientific and more productive crops in farming so that less land could use.
The last Argument the author presented that because the use of chemical pesticides in farming, the bird’s population decreased. The pesticides mix with water and the birds drink that toxic water and also easts the toxic insects, which killed them or caused them irregular reproduction. The speaker informed that after get knowledgeable about the calumny of chemical pesticides, now peoples use less chemical products. Now, instead of using pesticides peoples used more genetically strong crops that prevent insects naturally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... or caused them irregular reproduction. The speaker informed that after get knowled...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rops that prevent insects naturally.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, second, so, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 5.01324503311 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42905405405 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83339219027 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496621621622 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9426283583 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.4375 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8125 7.06452816374 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299707020848 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990812840871 0.0996497079465 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676784872731 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181261772537 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555850132521 0.0443174109184 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.