TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing a job is not an easy task and one must choose a job, which give him self-satisfaction and which he likes to do. It is true that whichever job we choose our parents always have influenced us to choose a field. I personally think children should follow the footsteps of their parents and choose the same job as their parents have done. There are certain advantages and I prove my stance by giving various points and sharing my experience.
First of all, there is an influence from our parents in our lives and we sometimes do subconsciously what our parents have done. For example, a child chooses science in his high-school because his parents are teacher or doctor. Besides that, if a child chooses the same field as his parents, parents might help him during his study because they know the subjects. Thus, he can get better guidance. For example, if a doctor’s children choose to engineer his parents might not help him that much in his field of study. Where an engineer parents his child if he chooses the same field.
Secondly, if a child chooses the similar job like his parents, they can also help him in his job problems. For example, if a child chooses to become a doctor and his parents were engineers, they do not understand his specific problem in the job and solving a problem, is in all over in the sea.
In my personal experience, I choose the same profession as my father; choose to be a civil engineer. There is the myriad help that I am getting from my father. First, he helped me during my school and taught me mathematics and other science subjects. Then he helped me on my field subjects and also taught me how to apply those theories in the practical field. As he working as a site engineer I always visit the site with him and learned different aspects of the jobs. While I had the problem with my job, I discuss with him and I get the perfect solution because he has the experience already. Now, if I choose another profession, might not get the help that much.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53719008264 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56848312059 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5082559299 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6842105263 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299447451316 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105084734168 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938446760862 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206684470109 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101463729907 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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