Essay topics:
TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans
Money is not an ideal thing that should be left on a child's hand and there are myriad factors should take into consideration before parents allow their children to handle money. In my opinion, in the process of became a financially responsible adult children does not need to handle their money and parents should not allow it.
First of all handle money could be problematic and sometimes, even adults cannot control money properly. Children need time to grow and they learn from their experience in different situations. There are multiple things already going on their life, they face new technologies and science invention on a quotidian basis. Today's children are not only studying but they have to learn many things in their lives, like attain a computer class or other extra-curriculum activity in sense of tackle their daily struggle. And diverting their minds toward money in order to become responsible adults could be onerous to them.
Money can affect people’s physiological behavior and sometimes complex the situation and relationships with others. Handling money needs a lot of consciousness and this burden can hinder the growth of children. This could affect a child's normal mental and physical growth and their behavior towards society could be changed in a detrimental way. As children are not mature enough and might not understand the value of money, they could spend their money in a wrong way. For example, toys and sweets sometimes are more attracted things to them, and they could have spent their money on them and the situation might be worse. Money can differentiate between peoples, even adults face it. Imagine if that happened to a child, for example, not every family financially stable and in a school, a child brings a lot of money and can showoff bout that child, whose family is not that rich might face insecurities, this could be fatal for their childhood.
There is always time to become a responsible adult. They might join colleges or courses like management or financial study and there are many policies that help peoples to manage their money. But first children should learn the value of money and parents should teach their children how to use the money. Peoples can argue that handling money is helpful for children. They might know the value of money by handling at a young age and start saving at the young age, which could be helpful for later. This could be true but get access a lot of money can harm children and parents can give their child a small amount of money as a pocket money to get an experience and the first step to become a responsible adult.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a detrimental way" with adverb for "detrimental"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...havior towards society could be changed in a detrimental way. As children are not mature enough and ...
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Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... of money, they could spend their money in a wrong way. For example, toys and sweets sometimes...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
...wrong way. For example, toys and sweets sometimes are more attracted things to them, and they...
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Line 7, column 627, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'pocket money'.
Suggestion: pocket money
... their child a small amount of money as a pocket money to get an experience and the first step...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 9.8082437276 296% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90112359551 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54130379365 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45393258427 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8374861692 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.05 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215994844188 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861262171224 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513287719197 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158415090024 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566917496225 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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