The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The crux of the argument is to offer a free-tuition policy at Seatown University for the purpose of attracting more professor and enhancing morale among faculty because of the faculty retention at Oceania University higher by offering the same policy to the college-aged children of its own students. The argument is based on unwarranted assumptions and flawed for the following reasons.
Primarily, the author claimed the hypotheses on the basis of a survey on Oceania University. The author concludes that the Seatown and Oceania university are alike and the same policy will be successful in a different university. First of all, the author does not provide any information about how many students and faculty were part of the survey. It might be possible that the survey was not complete and major faculties were not happy with the situation. Also, it would have been possible that the Oceania University offer a higher salary to the faculties and the tuition fees also higher than other universities, that's why it would have been possible for the faculties to offer free tuition to the students.
The author also claimed that the faculty retention rate had gone higher after implementing the policy. Although there is no data about at what number the faculties were retained. It would have been possible that even before the policy, the retention of faculty was higher because of other facilities provided by the Oceania University to the faculties.
The author claimed that implementing the policy to Seatown University will increase the mortality among faculties and luring more professor. But there is no viable evidence provided by the author or any data, which proves that student would be happy to get the facility or there is an objection from teachers to offer the free tuition. It would have been possible that free tuition will be a burden to the faculties because it might be possible that the student's ratio to the faculty is higher at Seatown University. Also, it would have been possible that the salary was lower compared to the Oceania university so that teachers would not like to do extra work and overall morale was diminished. Also, it is unwarranted to think that the moral would be higher only after implementing the policy, this kind of thinking is a stigma to the noble profession like teaching.
The following argument was flawed and based on unwarranted reasons and also, failed to provide any convincing data that bolster the author's claimed that implementing the free tuition policy would be actually useful for the Seatown University.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2118 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.995 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.476 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 617, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...es also higher than other universities, thats why it would have been possible for the...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e higher after implementing the policy. Although there is no data about at what number t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 454, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...s because it might be possible that the students ratio to the faculty is higher at Seato...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ally useful for the Seatown University.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07311320755 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67322499109 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.382075471698 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8944738729 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.4375 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346852819123 0.218282227539 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129203146614 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936431702589 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235360696882 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893967327705 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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