The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The given letter seems to be somewhat obscured with respect to the facts that it presents. It just represents a study without any surveys, reports and numbers to bolster the fact that it claims. At last, it tries to imbibe the same conditions present elsewhere to guarantee success at its own end.
The first sentence specifies that faculty retention is higher at Oceania University when tuition for children of professors are completely waived. This does not reflect any number or percentages on the number of professors being retained by using such a strategy. Also number of professors willing their children to study at such university is also not specified. Hence, the given sentence seems to be somewhat incomprehensible with respect to the fact that it tries to represent.
Although free tuition might incline some of the professor to have their children's as a part of the university, but there are a multiple factors which guarantees an admission. There might be some more good universities that the one presented in the letter that the professors might be interested in, either for their children or for themselves to enhance their future. Hence, free tuition might add some applications to university but admission is not guaranteed based on just a single criteria.
The last sentence specifies that the same policy of free tuition must be inculcated by Seatown University in order to retain their professors. Such a comparison might be completely vague as conditions that exists near Oceania University might not be same as in Seatown University. There might be a case that applying the same policy might not be as effective as in the former one. Also, there might be some other charges or fees that Oceania might be applying apart from tuition on their students. Hence, it might be completely unreasonable to apply the factors that guarantee success at one university to have the same effect at the other.
Hence, some more insight is required in order for the letter to be evaluated as valid for policy enhancement at Seatown university. Based on only the study presented, it might lead to some unfavorable conditions which might lead Seatown University into some kind of trouble. Therefore, a complete report on conditions existing at both the universities might then be useful for some fruitful decisions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1907 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.992 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.754 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.966 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...eing retained by using such a strategy. Also number of professors willing their chil...
^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... Although free tuition might incline some of the professor to have their childrens as a ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 486, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criterion'?
Suggestion: criterion
...s not guaranteed based on just a single criteria. The last sentence specifies that ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, then, therefore, apart from, kind of, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12827225131 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81328368923 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437172774869 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.9053953101 57.8364921388 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.833333333 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254548683345 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101429949982 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877218176537 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158777443923 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545358627285 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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