TPO-13 - Integrated Writing TaskPrivate collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other larg

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TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task

Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a big business. Rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars. This is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.

The public suffers because fossils that would otherwise be donated to museums where everyone can see them are sold to private collectors who do not allow the public to view their collections. Making it harder for the public to see fossils can lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, which would be a pity.

More importantly, scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. Wealthy fossil buyers with a desire to own the rarest and most important fossils can spend virtually limitless amounts of money to acquire them. Scientists and the museums and universities they work for often cannot compete successfully for fossils against millionaire fossil buyers.

Moreover, commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. Most commercial fossil collectors are untrained or uninterestedin carrying out the careful field work and documentation that reveal the most about animal life in the past. For example, scientists have learned about the biology of nest-building dinosaurs called oviraptors by carefully observing the exact position of oviraptor fossils in the ground and the presence of other fossils in the immediate surroundings. Commercial fossil collectors typically pay no attention to how fossils lie in the ground or to the smaller fossils that may surround bigger ones.

In the article the author talks about how unfortunate it is for scientist and common public, increasing trading of fossils between private collectors. Since there has been a growth on private dealership of fossils and billions of money involving in it, the rarest fossils were bought by private collectors. So, common people miss out on the chance of seeing it. In the lecture, the speaker opposes the idea by saying it has been exaggerated.

The First point the author has shown in the topic is since private collectors buying the fossils by spending billions of dollars they are not open for common peoples and scientists, unlike museums where everyone can see it. It is upsetting for common peoples that they miss the chance to see the fossil. The speaker rules out by saying, since cheap fossils are available for common buyers, like school or small institutions can buy those fossils and could be available for common peoples.

The second point author brought in-front is, private collectors buying some rarest fossils by spending a lot of money and scientist and museums do not have that amount of money, scientists cannot get access to some rarest fossils, so this is unfortunate for scientist miss the chance to examine some rarest fossil. The speaker counter the point by saying, it is not true that scientist cannot access those fossils. Science, every excursion lead by a group of scientists and before going to the private collector the fossil was identified and tested by scientists. Exposing public sometimes might cause harm to the fossil.

The third point the author talked about, scientist recently fossil of a nest building dinosaurs and surrounding fossils. The private collectors do not care about the small fossils around the main fossil, they damage the small fossils. Thus scientists miss the chance to study the history of those fossils as pieces of evidence are simply wiped out. The speaker rules out the idea by saying, science the excursion is done by scientist there are not many chances of damage and it better to find out more fossils rather than just leave them underneath.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...could be available for common peoples. The second point author brought in-front...
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...e chance to examine some rarest fossil. The speaker counter the point by saying, it...
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... fossil, they damage the small fossils. Thus scientists miss the chance to study the...
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...e are not many chances of damage and it better to find out more fossils rather than ju...
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...rather than just leave them underneath.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, third, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 352.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01988636364 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44993615777 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46875 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5013086293 49.2860985944 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 21.698381199 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26666666667 7.06452816374 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.515699063326 0.272083759551 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198897344092 0.0996497079465 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959310233188 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347872760084 0.162205337803 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337401332231 0.0443174109184 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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