The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunny Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the shower-heads in the first three buildings of the Sunny Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunny Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying shower-heads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunny Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The topic was about the argument of increase in profit in the Sunny Tower complex after restricting the maximum water flow. The argument is flawed for following unwarranted reasons.
Primarily, the author assumed that restrict maximum water flow leads to profit, this might look convincing in first but, what if there was no loss before installing new shower head and restriction of water flow actually create problems for families. water requirement for every family is different and limiting the usage is unconvincing.
Besides, the author never provides what was the reading before the application of the new rule. The new reading is not available yet. It might be possible the reading of past and present will be the same. The author made an unwarranted assumption that there will be considerable saving after restricted the water flow, but there is no convincing data. It might be even possible that savings had been made but at what cost, it is clear that some people facing low water pressure, might because they have large water demand. other families yet not facing problems does not mean there is no problem, the other families might not yet register their complaints. So, there is no problem claimed by the author is a vague assumption.
On the other hand, it might be possible that the modified is faulty. as, some launch their complaints about low water pressure, where other families not facing any problem. It might be possible that because of the faulty shower head creates a low pressure or does not work at all.
The argument is flawed because it based on various unwarranted assumptions and failed to provide any convincing data that, because of the modified shower head the Sunny Tower complex saves more and it is also unconvincing that only because of saving the profit will increase dramatically. The author also overlooks the myriad data and theories. The author should have to provide more convincing and pragmatic data to make his argument more convincing.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1619 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.906 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.489 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.38 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Water
... actually create problems for families. water requirement for every family is differe...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Other
...t because they have large water demand. other families yet not facing problems does n...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 69, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...e possible that the modified is faulty. as, some launch their complaints about low...
^^
Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...overlooks the myriad data and theories. The author should have to provide more conv...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, look, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02121212121 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55188401566 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.6282389216 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4705882353 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163397408841 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516628512323 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756792717835 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117310665645 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740614861832 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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