Essay topics: The Gordon Act, which established a wildlife refuge in the Big Dark Swamp, is currently up for reauthorization. The act prohibits the building of roads or cutting of old growth trees in the swamp, though it permits hunting. Many blamed logging activities for the decline of the bird population, especially that of the dappled grackle. The grackle population has continued to decline since the passage of the law, demonstrating that the Gordon Act has not been sufficient to protect the species. Another nearby refuge, the Wayne County Marsh Habitat, bans all mining, logging, and hunting. Wayne County officials have not reported a decline in the grackle population there. This proves that hunting, not logging, was responsible for the population drop in Broomall County. Thus, Broomall County should not reauthorize the Gordon Act unless it is amended to include the same provisions as those in Wayne County.
The argument was about The Gordon Act failed to protect the population of the dappled grackle, and since the population is decreasing the act must include provisions like Wayne County. The argument is flawed for the following reasons.
Primarily, the author claimed that the population of dappled grackle bird is decreasing because of hunting and continued to decline since the passage of the law. First of all, there is no solid feasible evidence to bolster the argument of the author. For example, the weather might be changed and since the climate is not suitable for the bird they might decline. It is possible that the grackle birds were not hunted at all since they are declining hunters avoid them. It is also possible that because of illegal logging the food and the shelter destroyed and the grackle birds migrating to the Wayne County.
Another claim the author presented that, since the Wayne County prohibited the mining, logging, and hunting, the population of the grackle bird is static. The author does not provide any data to support his claim. It might possible that the grackle birds even does not been there at all or maybe in the county for a certain period of time. Another reason might be possible that because of climate change the grackle birds now proliferate in the county.
The argument is based upon unwarranted reasons and failed to provide any convincing cases that The Gordon Act swap with the Wayne County law. The two-places might be different from each other and hunting might be a source of food for the indigenous people. The author should provide a more pragmatic date to convince readers.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 276 350
No. of Characters: 1326 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.076 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.804 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.329 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.181 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.214 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.382 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ll or maybe in the county for a certain period of time. Another reason might be possible that ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...urce of food for the indigenous people. The author should provide a more pragmatic ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 2260.96107784 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 276.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90579710145 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37612662452 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467391304348 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1837661841 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7142857143 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0642914749671 0.218282227539 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0241339138459 0.0743258471296 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298160657708 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.050822820592 0.128457276422 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326793121976 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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