The Gordon Act, which established a wildlife refuge in the Big Dark Swamp, is currently up for reauthorization. The act prohibits the building of roads or cutting of old growth trees in the swamp, though it permits hunting. Many blamed logging activities for the decline of the bird population, especially that of the dappled grackle. The grackle population has continued to decline since the passage of the law, demonstrating that the Gordon Act has not been sufficient to protect the species. Another nearby refuge, the Wayne County Marsh Habitat, bans all mining, logging, and hunting. Wayne County officials have not reported a decline in the grackle population there. This proves that hunting, not logging, was responsible for the population drop in Broomall County. Thus, Broomall County should not reauthorize the Gordon Act unless it is amended to include the same provisions as those in Wayne County.
The author claims in the paragraphs that the reautorization of the gordon act,which established a wildlife refuge in the Big Dark Swamp, must be reconsidered. I partially agree with the necessity of blocking the amend of Gordeon act in broomal country. however, although the evidences such as the reduction of opulation, prohibiting the building road, cutting trees the author mentioned seems enough to support his stance, the argument can improve the quality of the essay by considering few factors. The following will discuss the pros and cons of reauthorizing the gordon act in the whole society.
Admittedly, reauthorization of the gordon act might deteriorate the quality of the life in many aspects. Speaking of the financial sides, blocking the possibility of increment of housing prices by prohibiting the building roads might be dissatisfied to people who are living nearby the Broolma country. Inspite we delete the profits they can get through the investment, the ban of hunting might cause more serious financial problems for them because the hunting animals around the area probably be one of the significant source they earn money. In addition, forbit of cutting tree perhaps ban the chances to construct facilities. Despite of the level of lack of provisions for those in wayne country, there are still benefits for reauthorization of the gordon act, and the rest of the argument consider the positive part of amending acts.
First, maintaining copious of old growth trees allow the great ecosystem because it is the fundamental source of all organic life through out the whole earth. even though removing the tree gives the residents the option to make benefit by exploting the regions, the total gain in our communities is bigger than theirs. What if the wayne county affects great influences toward the amount of fresh air from lots of trees? by calculating the sum of gain in society, insisting the opinion of author seems selfish position.
Secondly, the permission of the reauthorization of the gordon act have flaws even for the neighbors in broomall county. For example, the gordon act include obstructing the building of roads. if lots of roads are constructed in Brromal county, it leads more decline in the demographic statics because of noise of cars in the roads or the air pollution from the emission of carbon dioxide from plenty of cars.
Thirdly, the author indicate the drop in the grackle population there because of the shortcomings prohibition of hunting, not logging. however, the fact or reliable documents to support the relations between them are not enough in the paragraph. it is possible other keys impact greatly to imigrant people to different countries. this can be hardly explained by few things because every person have different predilation and preferences.
In conclusion, although the reauthorization of gordon act cause the dissatisfaction for the interest group who insist the same stance with the author, he should argue the extend of explanation of opposite side too. if he involve the factors referenced in this essay, then the author can strengthen their position and make more fruitful argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 510 350
No. of Characters: 2595 1500
No. of Different Words: 264 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.752 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.088 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.612 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.66 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...hat the reautorization of the gordon act,which established a wildlife refuge in the Bi...
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Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
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...ly agree with the necessity of blocking the amend of Gordeon act in broomal country. howe...
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Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: However
...mend of Gordeon act in broomal country. however, although the evidences such as the red...
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Line 1, column 601, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ng the gordon act in the whole society. Admittedly, reauthorization of the gordo...
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...ns for those in wayne country, there are still benefits for reauthorization of th...
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... fundamental source of all organic life through out the whole earth. even though removing t...
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...ganic life through out the whole earth. even though removing the tree gives the resi...
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...mount of fresh air from lots of trees? by calculating the sum of gain in society,...
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...inion of author seems selfish position. Secondly, the permission of the reauthor...
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...lude obstructing the building of roads. if lots of roads are constructed in Brroma...
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... of carbon dioxide from plenty of cars. Thirdly, the author indicate the drop i...
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... from plenty of cars. Thirdly, the author indicate the drop in the grac...
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Line 17, column 87, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shortcomings'' or 'shortcoming's'?
Suggestion: shortcomings'; shortcoming's
...grackle population there because of the shortcomings prohibition of hunting, not logging. ho...
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...n them are not enough in the paragraph. it is possible other keys impact greatly t...
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...imigrant people to different countries. this can be hardly explained by few things b...
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Line 17, column 440, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... different predilation and preferences. In conclusion, although the reauthorizat...
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...stance with the author, he should argue the extend of explanation of opposite side too. if...
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...nd of explanation of opposite side too. if he involve the factors referenced in th...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'involves'.
Suggestion: involves
...explanation of opposite side too. if he involve the factors referenced in this essay, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, for example, in addition, in conclusion, speaking of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2674.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 509.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25343811395 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87933287051 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542239685658 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0539981014 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.545454545 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1363636364 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26705822088 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702809489835 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732309863962 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121199643865 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860973658053 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 98.500998004 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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