TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The article states that "buzzing" The companies hire people, buzzer who personally promote the product to the people arouse a lot of arguments, and many critics would like to prohibit it and provide three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that these arguments are really misleading and not true about the buzzer and refutes of the author's reasons.

First, the reading states that the Buzzers do not tell the truth about the product since they are being paid from the advertising companies. They might give a person incorrect information about the product that leads misleading the consumers. The professor refutes this point, he states that the first complaint about they are not telling the truth is not correct since the companies find the people who use the product and think that product is good and hire them called "buzzer", Therefore, they are not likely as advertisers. It is true that they are get paid but they are telling the people the truth about the product.

Second, the article claims that the buzzer shows as a private individual and the consumers do not know about what they are being present, they might accept the product and believe them while the advertising on TV and paper, consumers most likely to questionable claim about the product. However, the professor says that buzzers sometimes are not believable from the people since when they talk to them about the product, the people ask them a lot of questions about the price, how to use, and the quality and if they did not have the answer, they will not buy the product.

Third, the reading claims that buzzer has a detrimental effect on social relations. They might less trustful of all people in general since they thought all people they meet, might be buzzers. The professor says that this claim is problematic; he explains that if the product is bad, they company will not hire them. The people who bought the product, and have a good experience about the product, they will trust of buzzer and all the people.

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Average: 7.3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... people the truth about the product. Second, the article claims that the buzz...
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...wer, they will not buy the product. Third, the reading claims that buzzer ha...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'in general', 'it is true']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.215938303342 0.261695866417 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.169665809769 0.158904122519 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0565552699229 0.0723426182421 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0462724935733 0.0435111971325 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0642673521851 0.0277247811725 232% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105398457584 0.128828473217 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0231362467866 0.0370669169778 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57165923999 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.012853470437 0.0208969081088 62% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.141388174807 0.128158765124 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0205655526992 0.0158828679856 129% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0179948586118 0.0114777025283 157% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2056.0 1645.83664459 125% => OK
No of words: 344.0 271.125827815 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97674418605 6.08160592843 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.04852973271 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334302325581 0.374372842146 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.238372093023 0.287516216867 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.142441860465 0.187439937562 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0959302325581 0.113142543107 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57165923999 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424418604651 0.539623497131 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.6573176646 53.8517498576 79% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0529801325 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.6666666667 21.7502111507 132% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.0068122942 49.3711431718 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.333333333 132.220823453 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 21.7502111507 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.878197800319 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.39072847682 147% => OK
Readability: 52.503875969 50.5018328374 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.22935779817 1.90840788429 64% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.627755442571 0.549887131256 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.202876588584 0.142949733639 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.127857253093 0.0787303798458 162% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.71683931805 0.631733273073 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.172951492198 0.139662658121 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.361615912796 0.266732575781 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090390838644 0.103435571967 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.626480734629 0.414875509568 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0858200307388 0.0530846634433 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.491468489708 0.40443939384 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512388581429 0.0528353158467 97% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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"buzzing" The companies hire people, buzzer who personally promote the product to the people arouse a lot of arguments
Description: can you re-write this sentence?

the first complaint about they are not telling the truth is not correct
the first complaint about not telling the truth is not correct

they are get paid
they get paid
they are getting paid

They might less trustful
They might be less trustful

The people who bought the product, and have a good experience about the product, they will trust of buzzer and all the people.
The people who bought the product, and have a good experience about the product, will trust of buzzer and all the people.

Sentence: The professor says that this claim is problematic; he explains that if the product is bad, they company will not hire them.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to they and company

flaws:
No. of Words: 344 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.

No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 344 250
No. of Characters: 1627 1200
No. of Different Words: 138 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.73 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.244 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.275 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4