TPO-23 - Integrated Writing Task Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses expla

The reading and the lecture discuss the decline of Yellow Cedar from different perspectives. The lecture seems to negate all the claims made in the article. The lecture says people still do not know why the Yellow Cedar reduce significantly and none of those reasons that the article has mentioned are convincing.
First of all, the article points out that insects, particularly Bark Beetles eradicate the Yellow Cedar. This point is challenged by the lecture. The lecture restates the fact that healthy Yellow Cedar are bigger than the bark beetles. Moreover, the leaves of Yellow Cedar contain chemical poison, which are able to resistant insects and bark beetles. Therefore, the bark beetles cannot kill the Yellow Cedar.
Secondly, the article contends that brown bear can be the cause of the decline of the Yellow Cedar. The lecture rebuts this argument by saying that the populations of the Yellow Cedars are destroyed in many places, including England and Island. Meanwhile, these locations have no bear. As a result, bear cannot be a reason to reduce the Yellow Cedar.
Finally, the article states that the root of the Yellow Cedar suffer from the changes of climate. It is noted that the Yellow Cedar's root is sensitive, thus it would be frozen by cold weather. The lecture, on the other hand, opposes this point by arguing that if other trees also suffer from freezing climate, it will be true for the circumstance of the Yellow Cedar. However, there are more trees die in warm weather than in cold weather. Therefore, the reason that the Yellow Cedar destroyed by cold weather is unconvincing.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ate all the claims made in the article. The lecture says people still do not know w...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Cedar) must be used with a third-person verb: 'suffers'.
Suggestion: suffers
...tates that the root of the Yellow Cedar suffer from the changes of climate. It is note...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98513011152 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42927061124 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505576208178 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 409.5 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7767980114 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8823529412 110.228320801 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8235294118 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 7.06452816374 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375490442144 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138074115798 0.0996497079465 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618548901485 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230493968425 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738142477066 0.0443174109184 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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