TPO 25 - Integrated Writing Task
According to the passage, three arguments to demonstrate that ancient vessels were not made as electric batteries are presented. In contrast, the lecturer opposes to the explanations presented in the passage, saying they are not convincing.
First of all, it is thought to be truth that these vessels did not serve as batteries because they were not with electricity conductor when they were discovered. Whereas, the professor holds a contradictory viewpoint. She believes that the vessels were unearthed by local people who do not know much about the products they are holding. Even though they were holding conductors, they might threw them, seeing them as garbage.
Secondly, similar usage to the known copper cylinders from Seleucia, used for holding scrolls, is regarded to be an explanation to account for the theory because they are in the similar shape. Whereas, the professor puts forth that even though they are in the paralleled shape. It can be concluded that the usage of this vessels had two phases. For the original stage, it might serve as containers of scrolls. The vessels, however, could adapt for another usage for the second stage.
Third, since there were no need of electricity, the vessels might not be batteries. Nonetheless, the woman disagrees that electricity, indeed, was implemented in ancient times. First, it could be used to convince others. For instance, a self-called magical man might use it to make himself appear somewhat powerful. Also, electricity could be used to save lives like what modern doctors do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er opposes to the explanations presented in the passage, saying they are not conv...
^^
Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ty conductor when they were discovered. Whereas, the professor holds a contradictory vi...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
.... It can be concluded that the usage of this vessels had two phases. For the origina...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, third, whereas, for instance, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 7.30242825607 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 250.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.224 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72539465032 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9341019895 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.625 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.625 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409361273514 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11767804123 0.0996497079465 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079395700763 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224451794614 0.162205337803 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499998539681 0.0443174109184 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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