tpo 28
Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the north pole and claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. there is not solid evidence for proving his claim, the first reason, it is true that a committee was instructed for declaring his claim but the committee was not objective and many of committee members were Peary' close friend and those ones were biased so we can not trust to committee members. the second reason, that was not possible for him that uses the same kind of dogsled that used Avery because those foods that he might use at that time were unfavorable. the third reason, there are photographs taken by Peary for supporting his claim but we can not be sure really those pictures taken at the north pole because the pictures are not clear and we can not recognize that place is exactly north pole also the shadows for calculating the sun' position are not reliable and precise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. there is not solid evidence for proving his c...
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Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'those' instead.
Suggestion: those
...tee members were Peary close friend and those ones were biased so we can not trust to comm...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... we can not trust to committee members. the second reason, that was not possible fo...
^^^
Line 1, column 628, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ight use at that time were unfavorable. the third reason, there are photographs tak...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, really, second, so, third, well, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 30.3222958057 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 781.0 1373.03311258 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 171.0 270.72406181 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56725146199 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 4.04702891845 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2869161101 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 145.348785872 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 419.366225166 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 21.2450331126 198% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.945343807 49.2860985944 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 195.25 110.228320801 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.75 21.698381199 197% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.5 7.06452816374 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451977542778 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.222725616362 0.0996497079465 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16422227614 0.0662205650399 248% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.451977542778 0.162205337803 279% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 13.3589403974 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.77 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.0289183223 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 63.6247240618 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.498013245 179% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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