TPO 28 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about the exploration of North Pole by Peary, which is caused the celebrity of Peary, but there are some doubts that if he himself explore the North Pole. The author of the reading believes that Peary has investigated the pole by mentioning some reasons. The lecturer challenges the statements made by the author. She is of the opinion that Peary did not explore the pole.
First of all, the author of the reading indicates that the instructor of the Peary was investigated by the National Geographic Society and they accept the records and equipment. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that all of the members of the committee were the Peary's friends, in which they helped Peary to get some fund and complete his research. Meanwhile, the investigation was done during two days, which is not acceptable.
Secondly, the writer contends that the doubt of Peary exploration comes from the time of his tour which was reached to Pole only by 37 days, but Avery also reached there by 37 days. This argument challenged by the speaker. She establishes that it is a fact that Avery reached there by 37 days, but his food was carried by airplane and he did not carried food by himself.
Finally, it is mentioned in the reading that the photographs taken by Peary prove that he reached in the North Pole. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that the photographs shadow does not explore any thing, because the camera by which photos was taken, is not reliable. She established that those kind of camera gets some slightly photos so that the sun position does not mean that he reached to the North Pole.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed the pole by mentioning some reasons. The lecturer challenges the statements made...
^^^
Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... however, rebuts this by asserting that all of the members of the committee were the Peary...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'carry'
Suggestion: carry
... was carried by airplane and he did not carried food by himself. Finally, it is mentio...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...the photographs shadow does not explore any thing, because the camera by which photos was...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
..., is not reliable. She established that those kind of camera gets some slightly photos so ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, kind of, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 288.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72916666667 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48629538423 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461805555556 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5757614738 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.769230769 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422846367524 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155639117984 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999491721395 0.0662205650399 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255913068902 0.162205337803 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486557421059 0.0443174109184 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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