TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive,

The passage discusses the climate of Alaska's North Slope and how it might have been inhospitable to its dwellers, specifically dinosaurs. In order to explain how dinosaurs residing in Alaska withstood the arctic climate of the winter, the article introduces a hypothesis. Based on this conjecture, edmontasaurs, one of the most common North Slope dinosaurs, migrated to areas with more suitable weather conditions during winters. The professor, however, refutes this migration hypothesis by providing several arguments against the reasons that the passage renders in favor of the hypothesis.

First, as stated in the article, the edmontasaur's dietary habits probably endorsed the migration hypothesis. Edmontasaurs chief food source was plants and because there wouldn't have been any plant growth in the winter, these dinosaurs would have had to move to survive. Nevertheless, the lecturer mentions that sun light adequately reached the North Slope in the summer and plants would have flourished. By the advent of winter, plants would have died and their remnants could be devoured by the edmontasaurs.

Second, the article provides evidence that edmontasaurs lived in herds and it is usual for herds of animals to migrate seasonally. However, as mentioned by the professor, animals live in herds for a plethora of reasons, not just migration. For instance, for safety and protection. An example of an animal that lived in herds and doesn't migrate, is the Roosevelt Elk, a plant eating animal that lives in the forests of the western US.

At last, the passage states that edmontasaurs were able to migrate long distances. Although it is true, but this only applies to adult dinosaurs and not the juvenile ones. If the juveniles joined the herd for migration they would have slowed the group down. The edmontasaurs couldn't have left the youngsters behind because they would have died. Hence, the adults had to stay with them in the North Slope.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ood source was plants and because there wouldnt have been any plant growth in the winte...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...le of an animal that lived in herds and doesnt migrate, is the Roosevelt Elk, a plant ...
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Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...slowed the group down. The edmontasaurs couldnt have left the youngsters behind because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, for instance, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 311.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28617363344 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76456283403 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556270096463 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2240480924 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7058823529 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2941176471 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392602285006 0.272083759551 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115761792392 0.0996497079465 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436727048092 0.0662205650399 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222511325283 0.162205337803 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335187891661 0.0443174109184 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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