TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being repla

The article states that the Salton Sea's salinity level has been gradually increasing due to the higher rate of the lake's water evaporation compared to its replacement by rainfall or rivers. The passage suggests that if this increase in salinity continues, the lake will be inhospitable for populations of fish and bird residing in that region. The article argues that there are multiple ways to prevent this and introduces three of them. However, in the lecture, the professor argues that none of these solutions are pragmatic.

First, the passage mentions that the salinity of lake could be reduced if salt is removed from the water by the means of special desalination equipment. The lecturer argues that though this method would in fact decrease the salt level, it would pose certain health risks. If the water is distilled, it would leave out certain chemicals besides the salt. Some of which are noxious, such as Selenium. If the wind scatters this element and people breathe it, it would be dangerous to their health. Thus, it is safe to say that this method is impractical due to it potential dangers.

As for the second solution, the passage suggests that by constructing pipelines and canals, less salty water from the ocean can be mixed with the lake water, hence, reducing its salinity. According to the lecturer, this solution would likely work; But the government might not have the resources to build such infrastructure. The shore is 100 kilometers away and constructing such lengthy canals and pipelines is really expensive. Therefore, this method is also unrealistic because of its high cost.

At last, the article states that the lake could be divided into several parts; In the main section, salt level would be controlled by directing freshwater from revers into it, and in the smaller sections salinity would be allowed to go up. The professor, argues that this method is not durable. It might work for a short period of time, but because of the high geological actions in that area, something, for example an earthquake might occur and disrupt the walls. Consequently, water from different sections would mix again. Therefore, this method is not pragmatic either since the walls would eventually diminish.

In Closing, the professor refutes the practicality of each of the solutions mentioned in the passage by providing reasonable argument in their opposition.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... fish and bird residing in that region. The article argues that there are multiple ...
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Line 8, column 322, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... not durable. It might work for a short period of time, but because of the high geological act...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for example, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1373.03311258 146% => OK
No of words: 391.0 270.72406181 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13810741688 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68701694202 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 145.348785872 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0773922592 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.45 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239326805681 0.272083759551 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661447187247 0.0996497079465 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845666178298 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130897365117 0.162205337803 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774488737262 0.0443174109184 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 63.6247240618 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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