tpo 30

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tpo 30

Both the reading and the lecture try to discuse about the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse which is defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror. Although the reading states that it never really built, the lecture mentiones that it is possible that it was built.
At first, the reading declares that, the ancient Greeks had basic in technology so they could not built such a divice. On the other hand the lecture atates that they had formal large cooper so they could built it.
Second, the reading presents that the ship was built with wood. So the burning mirror would have take long time to burn. Consequently it is not possible concept. The lecture, however, claimes that, the ship was built by water proof peach in addition wood. the peach burn in a second. Thus it could go on fire quikly.
Finaly, although the reading states that burning mirror does not seem like an inprovement on a wapon that Greeks already had so it had no reason to bult a wapon like burning mirror, the lecture mentiones that they are familier with wapones and they see just the mirrore.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'build'
Suggestion: build
...d basic in technology so they could not built such a divice. On the other hand the le...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'build'
Suggestion: build
...y had formal large cooper so they could built it. Second, the reading presents that ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...rror would have take long time to burn. Consequently it is not possible concept. The lecture...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...er, claimes that, the ship was built by water proof peach in addition wood. the peach burn ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... by water proof peach in addition wood. the peach burn in a second. Thus it could g...
^^^
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ition wood. the peach burn in a second. Thus it could go on fire quikly. Finaly, al...
^^^^
Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... wapones and they see just the mirrore.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, really, second, so, thus, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 920.0 1373.03311258 67% => OK
No of words: 196.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69387755102 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17641364248 2.5805825403 84% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 145.348785872 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55612244898 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 419.366225166 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 70.1726324653 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6363636364 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36365788742 0.272083759551 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131373108792 0.0996497079465 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114131893327 0.0662205650399 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210626488731 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646764528053 0.0443174109184 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.2367328918 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 63.6247240618 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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