TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

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TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

The reading passage and lecture have conflicting opinions about whether Sinosauropteryx which was dinosaur found in China had feathers. The article strongly postulates that there is no possibility that it had feathers because of three compelling reasons. On the other hand, the listening adamantly delineates that none of the author's assumptions is plausible.

First and foremost, according to the professor in the lecture, this fine lines which founded from this dinosaur's skeleton could not be created by decomposition. this is mainly due to the fact that it was proved that the relics were well-preserved for centuries. In other words, other animals' fossils which were also founded in the same site indicated that they all in good situations. Nonetheless, the author offsets these points by declaring that fine lines function represented that they emerged after the animal's death. To be more specific, the animal's body was buried in volcanic ash and it decayed into fibres.

On top of this, the lecturer further asserts that its ornaments and feather had both distinct chemical compositions. For instance, feather has a great amount of essential protein named cretan, while its decorations do not compose of such chemicals. Hence, it clearly demonstrates that the fine lines could not be the animal's frills. These claims refute the writer's implications about researchers can not explain exactly where these lines placed on this animal's body, thus it might be ruffles of such an animal.

Lastly, the speaker in the lecture suggests that some birds have feathers to attract their mates which is called display function. Moreover, the scientist found that this dinosaur had orange and white feathers on their backbone and a tail like a peacock. thus, the above evidence clearly illustrates that the animal has used their feathers to appeal to their grooms. Nevertheless, the article counters these indications by insisting that if this animal used their furs normally, they might have been utilised as flight and regulating its internal temperature. However, the lines represent that it was located in its backbone and tail. Therefore, this structure was useless for this animal because its position definitely restricted its flight and thermoregulation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dinosaurs'' or 'dinosaur's'?
Suggestion: dinosaurs'; dinosaur's
...this fine lines which founded from this dinosaurs skeleton could not be created by decomp...
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Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... could not be created by decomposition. this is mainly due to the fact that it was p...
^^^^
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...represented that they emerged after the animals death. To be more specific, the animal...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the animals death. To be more specific, the animals body was buried in volcanic ...
^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...eir backbone and a tail like a peacock. thus, the above evidence clearly illustrates...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 22.412803532 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 354.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40395480226 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80118896978 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 145.348785872 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570621468927 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3640937201 49.2860985944 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.277777778 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06452816374 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383308276532 0.272083759551 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111295296132 0.0996497079465 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615248592955 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206373320222 0.162205337803 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729702226186 0.0443174109184 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 63.6247240618 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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