TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

Bothe the lecture and the passage is about that whether Sinaosauropteryx had feathers. The reading asserts that Sinaosauropteryx was not a feathered dinosaur by peresenting tree reasons. In the opposition, the professor cast doubt on every single evidence mentioned by passage.

First, the writer implies that line in the fossil is a result of animal skin decomposition. After death of animal, their skin decomposed into fibers preserving as line in the fossil. Conversely, the professor states that the others animal fossil did not decompose. Therefor, it dose not like that the line is form decomposition.

Second, the reading points out that line is remains of frills which was a part of dinosaurs body. In the contrast, the lecturer expresses that the chemical composition of of frill and feather is different. Frill has a special kind of protein that feather dose not have. In addition the evidence indicates that the lines dose not contain that protein, thus, they are not remains of frill.

finally, the passage mentions that feather has two obvious function, keep the body warm and make flight possible. As, these two function does not seem to be useful for Sinaosauropteryx, they does not need feather. On the other hand, the professor refuses this claim by explaining that feathers can have some other role. For example, there are some kind of birds which use their feather to attract male. Also, the evidence shows that the dinosaur feather was colorful and they could have the same role as that kind of birds feathers have.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...x had feathers. The reading asserts that Sinaosauropteryx was not a feathered din...
^^
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doses'?
Suggestion: doses
... fossil did not decompose. Therefor, it dose not like that the line is form decompos...
^^^^
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...expresses that the chemical composition of of frill and feather is different. Frill h...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... protein that feather dose not have. In addition the evidence indicates that the lines d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Finally
...thus, they are not remains of frill. finally, the passage mentions that feather has ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...to be useful for Sinaosauropteryx, they does not need feather. On the other hand, th...
^^^^
Line 7, column 349, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
...other role. For example, there are some kind of birds which use their feather to att...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, if, second, so, thus, for example, in addition, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1291.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08267716535 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74412837901 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555118110236 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.9891460331 49.2860985944 36% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.6875 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313694071161 0.272083759551 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103712609989 0.0996497079465 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770832263737 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178493953852 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746432882341 0.0443174109184 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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