Education has become one of the momentous issues in the modern era which has always engendered heated debate among academicians. A question which is raised in this regard is whether parents should use money as a reward for students' mark. While some people assert that this behavior can exert undue influence over children, the others hold the opposite perspective. I contend that the advantages of this method carry more weight than the disadvantages owing to some substantial reasons. The following paragraphs will elaborate on my points of view.
The most privileged reason is that the parents should motivate their children, thus they need to use awards to encourage them. Besides, money can be an excellent prize for children, hence, it can inspire students to study more effective. As a result, they become more successful. For instance, when I was in the primary school, I did not like to study due to it was tedious for me. My parents talked to my teacher to find a conceivable solution. Then, they decided to use money as a motivation for me. on the other hand, I always wanted money to by the games. It really worked as I realized the more I studied, the more I can buy games. It indicates that money can be helpful for students improvement.
Another considerable reason which deserves some words here is that using money as an award makes the opportunity for students to choose what they want to buy. It makes the children more independent as they can decide for themselves. Also, making decision boosts their self-confidence which would have a beneficial impression on their future career. A recent survey on this topic has been done in Japan. They examine the effects of paying money to childrens' score because they are so conservative in their education system. It turns out that this will learn students how to make a decision. Consequently, offering money for grades is instructive.
In brief, while some deleterious results can be mentioned by criticisms of this plan, I think it would be advantageous. Because this method not only intrigues students make more efforts but also makes them more independent. I recommend that parents exploit money as a bonus for their student attempt.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, hence, really, so, then, thus, while, for instance, i think, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 22.412803532 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 370.0 270.72406181 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97027027027 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77321662699 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 13.0662251656 184% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4152022205 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.625 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4166666667 21.698381199 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0848962805133 0.272083759551 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266617340187 0.0996497079465 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265976549091 0.0662205650399 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618067754951 0.162205337803 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186279317439 0.0443174109184 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 63.6247240618 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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