TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

The reading and the lecture are both debate about strange underwater sounds detected by sailors in Russian submarines. The author of the readings thinks that there are three explanations, whereas the lecturer argues that these reasons are not satisfactory.

First of all, the author mentions that the strange noises could be the sounds emitted by Orca whales males to attract the female during the courtship ritual. The lecturer casts doubt on this theory and explains that is highly unlike because even these animals are present in the North Atlantic and the Arctic Ocean, they live near the surface and not at the depth where these sounds were registered by submarine sonars.

Second, the author proposes that these sounds are caused by the giant squid, he believes that there is a possibility that these smart animal have the ability to emit sound, but they do not have the skeleton and their soft bodies cannot be detected by sonars. the lecturer rebuts this claim, she notes that the squids disappeared for two decades before the 1980's, and according to her there is no reason to reappear 20 years later.

Finally, the author suggests that that the sounds could have come from foreign submarines which use a kind of technology designed to be undetectable by sonar. the lecturer put forth the idea, she feels that this theory cannot holds up because the today submarines can not move as fast as the sound registered. furthermore, today technology is not so advanced to make submarines to not be detected by sonar.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
...ft bodies cannot be detected by sonars. the lecturer rebuts this claim, she notes t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
... later. Finally, the author suggests that that the sounds could have come from foreign...
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Suggestion: The
...y designed to be undetectable by sonar. the lecturer put forth the idea, she feels ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...t move as fast as the sound registered. furthermore, today technology is not so advanced to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, second, so, whereas, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1271.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96484375 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42325754389 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57421875 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6904709112 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.222222222 110.228320801 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435275875998 0.272083759551 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167537109144 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896224122639 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23855148638 0.162205337803 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086827783449 0.0443174109184 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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