TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

First that, the atmospheric pressure of venues is 90 times greater than the pressure that exist on the earths surface and with this pressure any spacecraft and human that landed there where destroyed, as the reading explains, is refuted by the professor. He asserts that stablish and set up station that floating on Venuses’ atmosphere like a balloon that can float 50 km rather than standing on its surface and there is no danger there and the station do not be crushed.

Second that, there are no resources of water and oxygens on Venus’s surface, as the reading shows, is rejected by the professor. He explains that there are some chemical processes that can create water and oxygen in the station in the Venuses’ atmosphere and it is not necessary to import them.

Third that, there are situation that very little sunlight reaches the planet surface, as the reading exposes, is refuted by the professor. He says that the clouds are not so thick and some sun lights can pass through of that moreover the station solar cells can absorb the reflected sun lights and generate powers for humans and their equipment.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
First that, the atmospheric pressure of ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and the station do not be crushed. Second that, there are no resources of w...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it is not necessary to import them. Third that, there are situation that ver...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'situations'?
Suggestion: situations
...ort them. Third that, there are situation that very little sunlight reaches the p...
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Line 5, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... powers for humans and their equipment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 1373.03311258 69% => OK
No of words: 192.0 270.72406181 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92708333333 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56478556609 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552083333333 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 419.366225166 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.9924235901 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.666666667 110.228320801 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 21.698381199 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298120609468 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140120345358 0.0996497079465 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0243738852297 0.0662205650399 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191712088432 0.162205337803 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00570684753699 0.0443174109184 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.3589403974 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 53.8541721854 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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