TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In this set of materials, the reading passage suggests three solutions that can keep birds safe from flying through glass windows and getting harmed. However, the lecturer finds all the idea dubious and skeptical and unlikely to help them and provides some evidence to refute them all.

First of all, the author of the passage claims that people should replace the regular glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. On the contrary, the professor contends that this kind of glass just reflects the light so acts like a mirror which is as bad as regular glass. Birds cannot understand the difference between reflection and reality so they cannot understand that the reflection of sky or tree is not real and fly right toward them. Therefore, this idea cannot be a logical solution.

Furthermore, it is mentioned in the passage that if people paint colorful lines on regular glass, birds avoid to go through the window. Conversely, the lecturer believes that birds see the space between lines like opening holes and go right through them unless the openings are extremely thin which make indoor too dark. Hence, it cannot solve the problem effectively.

Finally, the reading asserts that an artificial magnetic guides birds to stay away from the glass since they have a natural ability to sense Earth’s magnetic fields. In contrast, the lecturer states that birds use this ability only when they travel long distances. For example, when winter comes they migrate from cold area to warm locations. When they go over short distances they use their eyes and the light. Thus, the magnetic glass will not assist birds.

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Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid going', 'avoid gonna'.
Suggestion: avoid going; avoid gonna
... colorful lines on regular glass, birds avoid to go through the window. Conversely, the lec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in contrast, kind of, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 273.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05494505495 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37276699497 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59706959707 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0215194109 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5714285714 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 7.06452816374 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.492387579793 0.272083759551 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153314617044 0.0996497079465 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945771664957 0.0662205650399 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265141653623 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545776818595 0.0443174109184 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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