TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The passage and lecture both discuss three hypotheses around using glass as a building material that lead to injuring birds because they try to fly through them. The reading claims that there are some solution which really help to solve the problem. In contrast, the professor explains that the justifications of the reading are not convincing, and he refutes each of the authors reasons.

Firstly, the text indicates that if we replace regular windows with one-way glasses that are transparent in only one direction, we can prevent more injures. However, the professor refutes this and says that when we use this kind of glasses, it works just like a mirror and reflect the sky and trees. So, they will fly into them.

Secondly, the passage puts out that if we paint these glasses with colored lines or other designs, it much more easier for birds to distinguish between them and other things. On the other hand, the speaker mentions that birds see unpainted glasses as an open hole, so they will fly through them. But, to prevent this problem unpainted spaces should be extremely small which really effect on the lightness of the room.

Thirdly, the reading points that using artificial magnet held undoubtedly prevent birds from approaching buildings. In contrast, the lecturer denies this and talks that they use earth magnet field when they want to migrate to far places. However, when they want to go from one part of the city to another part, they use their eyes or brightness of light to determine their direction. So, it does not much work.

In conclusion, based on reasons and analysis given by the professor, using one-way glasses, painting regular windows and creating artificial magnet held are not likely to solve the problem.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 108, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...colored lines or other designs, it much more easier for birds to distinguish between them a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03754266212 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41546134666 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563139931741 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5763034258 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.428571429 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57142857143 7.06452816374 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405402198966 0.272083759551 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121210872467 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904286201735 0.0662205650399 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201899548367 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506734644039 0.0443174109184 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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