TPO 45
Both the reading and the lecture focus on the possibility of existence of bees 200 million years ago, based on the discovery of very old fossil structures that resemble bee nests. Although the materials presented by the author corroborates his reaching, the speaker offers some evidences to refute them all. The passage brings the idea that the structures were not created by the bees, since the earliest found fossil of an actual bee is only half as old as the discovered fossilized structures. In contrast, the speaker believes that absence of actual bee fossils, 200 million years ago, does not imply the absence of the bees themselves, it can merely be a result of the absence of a sticky liquid produced by trees, called resin, that helped the fossilization of bee’s bodies. In addition, the reading passage reminds the absence of flowering plants, until 125 million years ago, as another evidence to doubt bees’ existence 200 million years ago referring to the idea of bees and flowering plants biological mutual dependence. On the contrary, the lecture suggests the theory based on which bees could had fed on non-flowering plants before the germination of flowering ones and evolved into the modern type ever after their origin. Finally, the author holds the view that the fossilized structures lack some of the fine details of modern nest chambers, suggesting that they were made by other insects. On the other hand, the lecture elucidates on the fact that the structures could have been made by the bees since both modern nest chambers and the found ones are almost chemically the same involving the same water proofing substance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1117, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ts the theory based on which bees could had fed on non-flowering plants before the ...
^^^
Line 1, column 1320, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...iew that the fossilized structures lack some of the fine details of modern nest chambers, s...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, so, in addition, in contrast, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 273.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05494505495 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60626250044 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534798534799 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 21.2450331126 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1558342779 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.5 110.228320801 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.125 21.698381199 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 7.06452816374 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0533224641021 0.272083759551 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0282123725544 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0207688754003 0.0662205650399 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0533224641021 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.3589403974 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 53.8541721854 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.0289183223 151% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.498013245 149% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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