TPO 18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Since the down of civilization, educational environments have been playing a key role in humans’ lives. In such places students learn not only educational courses but also lessons about life. They are influenced by their teachers and friends, and this is one of the most important aspects of schools. Considering this fact, the question striking to mind is who does have more impact on students, Their teachers or their friends. The answer to this question can be viewed from different perspectives which are elaborated upon on ensuing paragraphs.
First outlook suggests that teachers as the ones who teach so many various lessons to students can have a considerable impact on them. They are reputed to be the forerunners of science and education. For a great many students, they are role models and students set them on pedestal. Teachers can educate students so many courses as well as so many points about life. This way they can illuminate students’ minds and give them a clearer view of life. To exemplify, suppose that a teacher, an influential one, talks about the devastating disadvantages of using drugs with the students, this discussion can probably convince the students to never ever have a try on drugs, specially in case that some of them are prone to addiction. Hence, no one can turn a blind eye on the influence of teachers on students.
Alongside with the first opinion the second one indicates that friends can influence students equally. People of the same age have more points in common with each other than they have with elders or younger ones. Friends of the same age commonly share their secrets with each other, and when facing issues, they often tend to consult with their friends rather than asking for the elders help. Sometimes they may even put more value on their friends’ words than others’. As an illustration, the influence of deviant friends on delinquency cannot be afforded to be taken lightly. Bad friends can have as many negative effects as good ones have positive effects. Therefore, friends impact on students should also be taken into account.
All in all, to choose who influences students more, we should consider all the aspects. And it is incontrovertibly axiomatic that both teachers and friends can have significant impact on students. Consequently, in my opinion, none of the groups can be replaced with the other, but depending on the student, herself, and the way she is influenced by her friends and her teachers one of these groups can play a more effective role in her life. Thus, there doesn’t seem to exist an absolute answer to the aforesaid question.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0159453303 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79072565987 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503416856492 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8818273344 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7391304348 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234508017162 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738499955846 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676878492444 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1560244947 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431327517814 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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