TPO-45 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important for universities to invest in infrastructure and physical plant than to invest in keeping the faculty satisfied. Use specific reasons and examples

Universities have different needs, yet their budget is limited, and it's not possible to fulfill every need. There is a great concern about how to spend budget and invest in which area to get the best result. Although some people believe it's better to investigate in keeping the faculties satisfied, another group of people argue that the infrastructure is more important. I honestly think each group have the right to be concerned about both faculty's satisfaction and also infrastructure. However, I think taking care about infrastructure is more essential. Now in the following article, I try to vindicate my standpoint.
To begin with, to satisfy everybody is not possible in this world. A university consists of many different faculties, and each faculty has several departments. To satisfy each of them is extremely difficult especially with a limited annual budget. Besides, investigation into infrastructure and physical plant is a very important part of faculties' satisfaction. I suppose faculties would be happy having a better infrastructure in comparison to having buildings that are old, yet taking care about satisfaction doesn’t bring better infrastructure.
Additionally, a university has a great population, and this population causes some destruction. It's crystal clear that a building with lots of people going in and out needs more attention in comparison to an architecture with few people in it. Thus each building in a university needs repair about every 5 or 10 years, and it's crucial to fix the buildings of faculties.
Last but not the least, everything in this world is changing very quickly, and keeping up with the technology needs investigation in infrastructure. Even if buildings aren't old and don't need repair, it's important to equip them with new and modern equipment. It's interesting to point that, again equipping infrastructure with modern technology plays a major role in satisfaction of faculties. people need new buildings and infrastructure not to feel they're behind technology.
To make the long story short, not only is essential to keep faculties satisfied but also to take care about the infrastructure in universities. However, by looking more deeply toward the issue, albeit investigation in infrastructure is a part of faculties' satisfaction, the vice versa is not correct. Hardly are faculties satisfied with limited budget. And a crowded building needs lots of care and repair. Finally, since keeping up with technology in infrastructure needs a huge investigation, I conclude it's more advantageous to investigate in infrastructure.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Universities have different needs, yet t...
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...cle, I try to vindicate my standpoint. To begin with, to satisfy everybody is n...
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...in this world. A university consists of many different faculties, and each faculty has several...
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...sn't bring better infrastructure. Additionally, a university has a great p...
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... an architecture with few people in it. Thus each building in a university needs rep...
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...ial to fix the buildings of faculties. Last but not the least, everything in th...
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...on in infrastructure. Even if buildings arent old and dont need repair, its important...
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...uildings and infrastructure not to feel theyre behind technology. To make the lo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, honestly, however, if, look, so, thus, i suppose, i think, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 7.30242825607 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 30.3222958057 221% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1373.03311258 159% => OK
No of words: 403.0 270.72406181 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4317617866 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37310209329 2.5805825403 131% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496277915633 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 419.366225166 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.51434878587 528% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6254046823 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1739130435 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 7.06452816374 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 4.33554083885 392% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0630869104549 0.272083759551 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0222122054482 0.0996497079465 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0151545681797 0.0662205650399 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.041480718302 0.162205337803 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105992570449 0.0443174109184 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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