TPO 46
Both the reading and speaking try to discuss about the merits and demerits of the electronic versions of patient' record. Although the reading states that it have three important benefit, the lecturer disagrees with them all and brings three reasons to refute the ideas mentioned by reading.
Firs, the reading asserts that the electronic databases has the lee cost and can be easier to access than paper based. Conversely, the professor brings the idea that this reason is highly erroneous due to this fact that the adapting of doctors to this type of the databases is more expensive than what is expected. For example, if one doctor wants to keep his patient' data in electronic version he should pay the storing costs and it puts more financial pressure on them.
Furthermore, the author addresses that if the electronic databases are employed, it can cause the reduction of handwriting errors made by doctors. On the other hand, the lecturer rejects this idea due to this concept that most doctors will to use the pens and paper for they examination of the patients' statement and behavior. Therefore, the staffs may have some mistakes about the interpretation of doctors' purpose of their writings when they want to enter them in the electronic tools and change them to electronic versions. This means that in the electronic version there are some important errors which are not in the paper based one.
Finally, the passage explains that it is more proper for doctors to access the, medical researches and the other patient' data records through the electric databases. On the contrary, the speaker dismisses this reason due to the fact that although they can access the other databases, achieving to them required some permission from other doctors and in some cases governments and even from patients. Consequently, this permission in most of times brings about the blocking of the application of medical resources, if the doctor cannot give these permissions. According to this fact, utilizing this type of databases (electronic version) is inhospitable for doctors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 294, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...s and paper for they examination of the patients statement and behavior. Therefore, the ...
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Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...it is more proper for doctors to access the, medical researches and the other patien...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the times') or simply say ''most times''.
Suggestion: most of the times; most times
...ients. Consequently, this permission in most of times brings about the blocking of the applic...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'conversely', 'finally', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in some cases', 'on the contrary', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252717391304 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.127717391304 0.158904122519 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0788043478261 0.0723426182421 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0326086956522 0.0435111971325 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0407608695652 0.0277247811725 147% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135869565217 0.128828473217 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0326086956522 0.0370669169778 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.65019582459 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0380434782609 0.0208969081088 182% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.146739130435 0.128158765124 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0190217391304 0.0158828679856 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00815217391304 0.0114777025283 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2072.0 1645.83664459 126% => OK
No of words: 339.0 271.125827815 125% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11209439528 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04852973271 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365781710914 0.374372842146 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294985250737 0.287516216867 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.212389380531 0.187439937562 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147492625369 0.113142543107 130% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65019582459 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495575221239 0.539623497131 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.2061080447 53.8517498576 95% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0529801325 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0769230769 21.7502111507 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4188325039 49.3711431718 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.384615385 132.220823453 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 21.7502111507 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.923076923077 0.878197800319 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 55.5754481507 50.5018328374 110% => OK
Elegance: 2.09459459459 1.90840788429 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.567982484577 0.549887131256 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146997489701 0.142949733639 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0499819122438 0.0787303798458 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.644432161231 0.631733273073 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.114317736086 0.139662658121 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.27921713326 0.266732575781 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563929626036 0.103435571967 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.557515161527 0.414875509568 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0840155730512 0.0530846634433 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.413980236814 0.40443939384 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749253768887 0.0528353158467 142% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.26048565121 94% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.