TPO 46
The reading passage states that in the United States, the patient information traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms but still, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record system which allows them to record patient information in databases rather than on paper. This new method, may have several advantages. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the points made in the reading.
First, considering the article, electronic records can reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records since paper records need a significant amount of storage space and additionally, using electronic records can make a easily access to doctors from almost everywhere and can be duplicated or transferred when necessary. In contrast, the professor in the lecture contradicts the idea and further explains that electronic records may not make a significant change because many of the doctors, keep those documents on paper too as a way of backup and they most of them keep associated.
Second, the reading claims that electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors because illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data and nonstandard organization of papers can cause errors. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture refutes the information presented in the reading and makes the point that even by using electronic records, doctors will still use the paper by hand to check what the doctor has been writing before.
Third, the author in the reading passage puts forward the idea that electronic medical record can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. On the other hand, the speaker contradicts the idea and adds that because of the privacy problems, it may be hard for the researchers to have access to all this records since they have to get patients permission while some may prefer to keep their information private.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ally, using electronic records can make a easily access to doctors from almost ev...
^
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('easily') instead an adjective, or a noun ('access') instead of another adjective.
...ally, using electronic records can make a easily access to doctors from almost everywhere and c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, while, in contrast, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 320.0 270.72406181 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.271875 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73489994961 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 419.366225166 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 21.2450331126 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.9425682217 49.2860985944 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.444444444 110.228320801 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5555555556 21.698381199 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2222222222 7.06452816374 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.677358949068 0.272083759551 249% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.275587167047 0.0996497079465 277% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.211058661521 0.0662205650399 319% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.432244644206 0.162205337803 266% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055281155834 0.0443174109184 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 13.3589403974 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 53.8541721854 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.0289183223 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.7273730684 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.498013245 152% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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