TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes. How animals manage to migrate long distances is often puzzling. In the case of humpback whales, we may have found the answer: the

The reading passage explores the navigation methods of humpback whales and suggests that they may navigate by the stars. However, the professor in the lecture thinks that the argument is open to critique because the evidence passage shows is not convincing.

To begin with, while the reading points out that the extraordinary intelligence humpback whales possess helps them to use stars as navigating tools, the professor believes that there is no clear connection between intelligence and ability to navigate by stars. For instance, the professor argues that some animals like ducks, with a average cognitive ability, can navigate by stars. Moreover, it is more like an instinct that helps animals to use stars. Thus, the supporting evidence which the passage suggests is not associated with the ability to navigate by stars.

Secondly, the reading passage asserts that whales' straight line migration route could be a strong support to the argument. Nevertheless, the professor presents an alternative explanation to the phenomenon that whales move in straight lines. Instead of using stars, humpback whales may migrate with the aid of earth magnitude field. Plus, these whales have a bio-magnitude device in their brains. Hence, the whales could as well use this method to move in straight lines.

Finally, the professor believes that spy-hopping is not convincing evidence supporting the argument of the passage as well. Though it is a rare behavior, it also appears on some other animals such as sharks. However, sharks actually do not migrate; their heads float above the water to find potential preys. What is more, spy-hopping happens in the day for humpback whales, if they do use spy-hopping as a way to look at stars to navigate, it should, however, occur during night. Thus the professor rejects the connection between spy-hopping and navigating by stars.

To sump, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the reading passage and shows that the argument in the reading that humpback whales navigate by stars is not persuasive enough.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...gues that some animals like ducks, with a average cognitive ability, can navigate...
^
Line 7, column 481, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...it should, however, occur during night. Thus the professor rejects the connection be...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 328.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2987804878 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72158266366 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484756097561 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5778727902 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.235294118 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0588235294 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386940563893 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127220899798 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694883541453 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210336691839 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541147549744 0.0443174109184 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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