TPO-50
Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus the project of sending humans to Mars would require solving an array of problems the Moon missions did not have to face. One problem is that a round-trip to Mars and back is likely to take at least two years. The trip to the Moon lasted only a few days, and it was easy to bring enough supplies of food, water, and oxygen; but the cargo capacity of space vehicles is too limited to put on board the food, water, and oxygen required by a crew for a period of two years. Without those essentials, though, a Mars mission is impossible. A second problem is that astronauts on the Mars mission would be in the zero-gravity environment of space for many months at a time. Spending a long time in the zero-gravity environment has negative effects on the human body, such as decreased muscle mass and lower bone density. Over the course of a two-year mission, the effects would be so severe, they would make it impossible for humans to make the trip without experiencing grave medical problems. Finally, astronauts on a mission to Mars would be exposed to dangerous levels of space radiation, much of which comes in the form of charged particles emitted by the Sun. Earth’s magnetic field, which normally protects us from dangerous solar radiation, would not be able to protect a spaceship traveling in interplanetary space. Constructing a shield that would protect the whole spaceship from space radiation is at present impossible because it would add too much weight to the ship.
Both the reading and the listening materials discuss three hypotheses around mars traveling. The reading points out that traveling to the mars is impossible, however, the listening uses a number of points to refute the reading passage.
The article of the reading, firstly, suggests that astronauts cannot manage their food, water, and clean air supply during their trip to Mars because this travel takes at least two years. however, the professor elucidates that "hydroponic"-technology that makes possible to plant into the small area in outer space- solve the problem of a capacity of cargo limit.
Furthermore, the reading passage mentions another challenging problem about astronauts' health issue. Living in outer space, zero gravity, negatively affect muscle mass during two-years long trip. Nevertheless, the listening gives a solution that many astronauts went to space for a few weeks to months. They managed to slow muscle mass density by doing regular exercise in space.
The last point of the reading adds that hap hazardous solar radiation of the sun can be a more serious problem with a spaceship. The listening rejects this idea saying that solar radiation rarely is dangerous hence if astronauts protect them from that moment, it is manageable to set a spaceship with small shield room.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...e this travel takes at least two years. however, the professor elucidates that 'hy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1119.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 207.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40579710145 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18940110362 2.5805825403 124% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652173913043 0.540411800872 121% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.417387653 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.9 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0457780311616 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0176001366185 0.0996497079465 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0206043934759 0.0662205650399 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0287888085357 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240625178423 0.0443174109184 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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