TPO-50
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Everyone has his or her own crucial thoughts and mindset makes us different from each other. Those all thoughts and mindset taught from our school and university as an education. I am a student hence I feel as I have to add my view into this topic even if I never thought about it. To me, I am standing as a counterpart because of some reasons that will illustrate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, freedom is an important part. it gives us chance to make a mistake by releasing us from a box because when our failures decrease, our attempts decrease at the same time. Studying history is important to some of the university student due to their careers such as lawyers, anthropologists, and historians, on the other hand, learning past is not necessary(engineers, mathematicians, and physics). For example, there is policy to take a history course in my university; therefore, most of engineering freshman students including me had to take this course. most of us did not try hard and got average grade also below on history class due to our background knowledge and interest. At this time, what my perspective was what if we had a chance to choose another course we interest, we might be got better score and knowledge what we have to focus on.
Second, we should think about our, student’s, finances because we have unstable finance courses, mostly come from our parents and part-time jobs, but university tuitions are rapidly increasing last few decades unless caring our finances. it becomes high pressure, especially on our parents. For instance, I am an international student who pay extra 3 credits on unnecessary courses every year because of university policy. my university takes over $1000 on each credit from international students, and I did pay roughly $4000 that can buy a new laptop for my undesirable course to educate. this was being bothersome both my parents and me. For this reason, all university students should take a history course can be financially unfair to some of us.
In conclusion, I disagree with the university policy that every university student should take history course under financial and freedom issue, despite the fact that to learn from our past generation is an important lesson for us to grow.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98157894737 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03558192407 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565789473684 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5912838196 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.352941176 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217534364369 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732927872095 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725641866359 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145048611906 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044676634396 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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