TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

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TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

The reading states that an asteroid would be the best option to colonize, while the professor in the lecture asserts that colonization on an asteroid has many downsides as well.

Firstly, the reading believes that because the asteroid has relatively lower gravity due to its smaller size, the craft won't be pulled as strongly toward the asteroid's surface. Thus, it's safer to land on it than to land on Moon. However, the professor views the issue from an opposite angle. According to him, there are some risks about the lower gravity. People are more likely to get health problems such as suffering from muscle loss and lower bone density. The astronomers would get their muscle weak when staying on the spaceship just for a few months, let alone we being on an asteroid permanently.

Secondly, the reading claims that there are a large amount of valuable elements and precious metals on the asteroid which are in dearth on Earth. So if we can mine those elements and metals, it is profitable. Whereas the professor opposes the statement by saying that the costs of mining and transporting these materials back to earth would be so high that the profit could be quite minimal. Furthermore, if there are a large amount of precious minerals on the asteroid, the supply of them will increase, which will cause the decline of the valuable metals' price. So it may not be profitable.

Finally, the reading argues that there are a number of asteroids that come within Earth's orbit closer than Moon, which leads to the fact that it would be much more convenient and less expensive to get to and back from it. On the contrary, in accordance with the professor, the view doesn't hold water. It's because the asteroid may move away from the earth though they can be closer to the earth once. They may not stay close like the Moon which keeps itself on its orbit and go away, then it will be a challenge to get back to the Earth.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'lowed', 'lowered'.
Suggestion: lowed; lowered
...hat because the asteroid has relatively lower gravity due to its smaller size, the cr...
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Line 9, column 53, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...e reading claims that there are a large amount of valuable elements and precious metal...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 427, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...imal. Furthermore, if there are a large amount of precious minerals on the asteroid, t...
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Line 13, column 283, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...accordance with the professor, the view doesnt hold water. Its because the asteroid ma...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 302, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... professor, the view doesnt hold water. Its because the asteroid may move away from...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 339.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69616519174 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38345527017 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525073746313 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9653561925 49.2860985944 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0745043903346 0.272083759551 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259263413616 0.0996497079465 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251215039885 0.0662205650399 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0482598061587 0.162205337803 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150688518188 0.0443174109184 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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