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TPO 54 - Integrated Writing - Salinity in Salton Sea

The reading and the lecture are both about the problem of increasing salinity in the Salton Sea in California. The author of the reading passage puts forward some options to tackle this. The lecturer, however, casts doubt on these suggestions. She believes they are unrealistic and impractical.

First, the author claims that the high level of salt can be reduced by directly getting rid of salt in water, using special desalination equipments. The lecture shows reservation toward this solution as she think it poses serious health risks to the local residents. She explains it is not only salt that is removed during the process, but also other chemicals including toxins that can spread into the air and bring illnesses to people.

Another solution suggested by the author is to channel water from the Pacific Ocean to the Salton Sea to reduce its salinity as the ocean water is lower in salt level, compared to the lake water. According to the author, this can be accomplished through the use of pipelines or canals. On the other hand, the speaker points out that the distance between the lake to the nearest shore are still too far for pipelines and canals to be built, not to mention the local resources will not be adequate for the high costs of construction.

Finally, the writer puts forward the idea that dividing the lake into sections by building walls would allow control over its salinity with the help of freshwater from nearby rivers. On the contrary, the lecturer argues that the walls will not be cost-effective in the long run due to extreme geological activities in the area. Once an earthquake takes place, the walls will definitely collapse and high salinity water from the small sections will flow back to the main section, which proves the walls meaningless.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ts forward some options to tackle this. The lecturer, however, casts doubt on these...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...reservation toward this solution as she think it poses serious health risks to the lo...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93377483444 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54665686027 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566225165563 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9108094889 49.2860985944 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.615384615 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 21.698381199 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430998518248 0.272083759551 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11298061859 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114682684578 0.0662205650399 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218281927696 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136584461705 0.0443174109184 308% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments