TPO 54 Writing Integrated The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake The level of salt in the lake s water what scientists call its salinity has been increasing steadily for years because the lake s water is evaporating faster than it is

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TPO 54 Writing Integrated
The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health.

The article talks about several ways to decrease the salinity of the Salton sea which is actually a salty in land lake because it could be at risk of being a dead zone if the salinity keep increasing. In response, the professor explains that it will be great if we could decrease the salinity of the lake, but she says that the ways in the article are not realistic or not practice.
First, the article suggests to remove the salt from the lake in special desalination facilities. However, the professor states that this way will reduce the salinity, but it will cause a serious problem. When the water evaporate, it leaves solid materials behind. this solid material could be chemicals that cause health risk for people, such as the selenium which is toxic, and if it goes into the air and people breath it, it will be a reason of dangerous health issues.
Second, the article says that there is another possible solution which is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. According to the professor, this way would decrease the salinity, but due to the need for constructed canals, this method is very expensive for the government. that's why it is not practice.
Third, the last way in the article is to control the salinity by constructing walls to divide the lake into several sections. In contrast, the professor illustrates that this way will not last for long time since the area of the lake is exposed to frequent, intense activities for example: earthquicks. The walls will collapse after an earthquick, and the high salt section will mix back with the main section.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, for example, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 280.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71785714286 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50085444582 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510714285714 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 407.7 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3650947093 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.083333333 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 21.698381199 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06452816374 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44300130355 0.272083759551 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149491503439 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910415076332 0.0662205650399 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259059735907 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243444540095 0.0443174109184 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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