TPO 55 Writing 1Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number
In the passage, the author argues that use of box-shaped device surrounding the young trees wouldn't be the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification and brings up three reasons to support that. However, the professor contends that the reasons are not very convincing and the box-shaped devices worth fighting against desertification.
At first, the passage holds the view that devices costs alot and as a result growing trees would be a expensive process, since meaningful efforts to fight desertification involve growing millions of trees. The professor, on the other hand, believes that as the trees grow bigger their devices are removed and will be used for new and young trees. In fact each device can be used twenty two times, and if you divide the device cost by number of trees it would be a reasonable price.
Additionally, the writer mentions that local people are asked to install and maintain devices, whereas these people are working in harsh conditions and sometimes have hard time to provide food for their families. Therefore, it would be challenging to motivate these people to look after trees that cannot serve as a source of food for them. Nevertheless, the lecturer states that still there are possible rewards for these people. For instance, they can collect these devices to grow other plants and have more vegetables as a source of food. Moreover, when the trees grow they can use the branches as fire wood. Accordingly, both extra vegetables and fire woods would motivate people to help.
Finally, the author suggests that the device's ability to collect and conserve water is limited, which only can provide water to keep a small tree alive. Once the trees become too big for device, they mat not be able to survive. On the contrary, the woman points out that when the trees grow their roots will be long enough to reach down the moist beneath the surface. Therefore, once trees' roots reach the moist they can survive without the device. Actually, ninety nine percent of trees are still thriving after device beeing removed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...aped device surrounding the young trees wouldnt be the best way to grow trees in dry ar...
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Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... and as a result growing trees would be a expensive process, since meaningful eff...
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Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-two
... trees. In fact each device can be used twenty two times, and if you divide the device cos...
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Line 9, column 249, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'motivating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: motivating
...ies. Therefore, it would be challenging to motivate these people to look after trees that c...
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Line 13, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devices'' or 'device's'?
Suggestion: devices'; device's
... Finally, the author suggests that the devices ability to collect and conserve water i...
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Line 13, column 460, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: ninety-nine
...n survive without the device. Actually, ninety nine percent of trees are still thriving aft...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, whereas, for instance, in fact, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 350.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96285714286 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49700064976 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537142857143 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 419.366225166 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6349645088 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5625 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4375 7.06452816374 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101749720212 0.272083759551 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391061315588 0.0996497079465 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280103195477 0.0662205650399 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622559948841 0.162205337803 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254280254291 0.0443174109184 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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