TPO52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are higher rates of attention and concern to yong people from both parents and society. In my opinion young adults now are expected to follow more strict rules. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First of all, with the developements in healthcare systems, people are more educated about diseases and how to prevent them. As a result, parents are trying to apply all of these considerations on their children, which leads to strict rules and behaviors. In fact, parents are so caring for their children that they want to make sure that their children never get sick. That is why they oblige kids to follow strict health instructions. For instance, my aunt is too woried about her son, and she never lets him to play with stranger's kids, since they may carry a virus or diseas that would infect my cousin. Additionally, he should follow a very healthy diet, and he is not allowed to eat junk food. In the past, people didn' treat their children in that way, actually they were more free than young people in our era.
Moreover, with the increased rates of educated people, schools are now more strict and have higher expectaions from students. In the past people usually study only at elementary school level and would leave the school for finding a job. However, now it is mandatory for students to complete their high school and get diploma. The lessons are more tough than the past and teachers are teaching very professional topics to students. My own experience demonstrates this situation. five years ago when I was a high school student, I had a hard time studying my lessons and completing my homeworks. We were obliged to finish our homework on an specific time and upload them online for the teacher, which gave us a lot of pressure and stresses. Nevertheless, my parents didn't experience that strict and tough rules at their school. Had I lived twenty years ago, I would have had much easier time at school.
To conclude, I firmly believe that youngsters now should obey very tough rules that weren't in the past. This is due to the fact that not only parents care a lot about their health conditions but also schools are expecting them to study harder.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, for instance, in fact, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77892030848 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48915146068 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547557840617 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2701576589 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.5238095238 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129750535861 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420361807237 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435928332522 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877492790415 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396262859579 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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