Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
With the advent of internet and broad news coverage in media, many of people spent a huge part of they time exploring news and events happening around the world. However, in my perspective, these activities are a waste of time and it is not important to follow the events that it is unlikely that they will affect our daily life. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substanciate my viewpoint.
To begin with, in the modern lifestyle we in these days, there is enough problems and events to be concerned about them. Exporing about other events around the world should not be a priority, while we have moreimportant businesses to carry. In fact, if we pay attention to events that are not related to us we may be distracted. In some cases these events may add to our stresses and our concerns, since many of the events happening aound the world are related to politics, wars and hectic conditions. Therefor, by not following these news and events we will have a more relaxed and calm life. For example, my father follow news from all aound the world every morning he wakes up. We can see reflect of news in his behavior. When something bad, like a terrorist attack, happens in somewhere he is more aggressive and stressfull than other days. That is how these events and newa can influence our behavior.
Moreover, there is no need to follow a news or event, when they are not related to us and don't affect our daily lifestyle. There would be no differences if we now about an event in another place in the world or not. As a matter of fact, we can not change or influence that event, hence there is no point on following them. Instead, we can follow events happening locally or affecting our life. In that way we can be more helpful and use our time wisely, since we can contribute to that event. For instance, last year I found about an student event in our city that tries to supply neccessary products for poor children in the city. I joined that group and helped them to collect the money for helping other. Eversince that time Ii follow their activities regularly and help them as much as I can.
As a conclusion, following the events around the world, that are unlikely to affect our life is not a sesual way to spend our time. They are important for us, since they don't affect our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are enough problems'?
Suggestion: there are enough problems
... the modern lifestyle we in these days, there is enough problems and events to be concerned about them. ...
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Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
... conditions. Therefor, by not following these news and events we will have a more relaxed ...
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Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nt, when they are not related to us and dont affect our daily lifestyle. There would...
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Line 9, column 532, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... For instance, last year I found about an student event in our city that tries to...
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Line 13, column 171, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
.... They are important for us, since they dont affect our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in fact, as a matter of fact, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5308056872 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42001956354 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46682464455 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2413649608 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9090909091 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1818181818 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284120467774 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994055563406 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809000458812 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223945742316 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618732184127 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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