TPO 55 Writing Integrated
Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number of proposals involve growing trees, because trees can help protect soil and provide many other benefits to fight against desertification. Some scientists have proposed that the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification is by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. The device collects water that condenses from vapor in the atmosphere and helps the tree to grow. However, other scientists believe that this device will not be successful in fighting against desertification for the following reasons.
The reading passage states that using devices to grow trees in order to prevent lands from drying out will be a successful plan. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the reasons presented by the reading passage and finds them unconvincing.
First, considering the reading passage the cost of growing trees with these devices is too high that some countries can not afford the cost of applying this process for millions of trees. In contrast, the professor in lecture contradicts the idea and further explains that a tree grows enough within this device, the device can be removed and reused for another tree. So the final cost will not be that much high since each device can be used to grow about 20 trees.
Second, the reading claims that this plan needs participation of local people for installing and maintaining the trees but local people in these harsh areas are mostly reluctant to involve in this process because the trees are not beneficial for them. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture contradicts the idea and adds that some rewards can be planned to motivate local people to take part in this process. They can be allowed to use some devices for growing vegetables or use branches of the grown trees as firewoods which will encourage them to get involved in this process.
Third, the author in the reading passage puts forward the idea that these devices have a limited capacity of water and can just support trees for a restricted time. after that the trees can not survive the harsh environment alone since in some areas there will be no rain in 6 months which will the trees die. On the other hand, the speaker in the lecture refutes the information presented by the reading passage and makes the point that grown trees will be able to survive in harsh environments because of their long roots which reach the underground sources of water. Also, she mentions that 90% percents of trees in Sahara desert were able to survive after the devices were removed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 19, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...st support trees for a restricted time. after that the trees can not survive the hars...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, so, third, in contrast, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 30.3222958057 162% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 347.0 270.72406181 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82708933718 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35176512279 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478386167147 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 500.4 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.6552288142 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.583333333 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9166666667 21.698381199 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.096970528981 0.272083759551 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457998504151 0.0996497079465 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366413165845 0.0662205650399 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0695495666445 0.162205337803 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359625011981 0.0443174109184 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.0289183223 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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