TPO23 - Integrated TOEFL essay

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TPO23 - Integrated TOEFL essay

First, the reading passage states that, with insect parasites, the yellow cedar decline. In contrast, the professor in the lecture, refuses the ponit that made in the reading, and he further explains that, barken seed is a powerfull chemical procec and it causes a healthy seeder fast.

Second, the reading passage claims that, bear claw the cedar to eat the tree bark. In one spot, the professor in the lecture, rejects this idea, and he talks in Island there is not any bear, so they can responsible to survive.

Third, in the reading passage mentions that, changing climate have effect on root systems of the yellow cedar trees. On the other hand, the professor adds that, in norm and hight elovation the weather is too cold, and in this climates more trees will diet.

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Average: 4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 222, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ovation the weather is too cold, and in this climates more trees will diet.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, third, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 30.3222958057 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 648.0 1373.03311258 47% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 134.0 270.72406181 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83582089552 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.40232815919 4.04702891845 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20814829957 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 145.348785872 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641791044776 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 188.1 419.366225166 45% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3565147299 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06452816374 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246225259712 0.272083759551 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132322051691 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833397685576 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168580215372 0.162205337803 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580356929354 0.0443174109184 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 63.6247240618 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 40.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 12.0 Out of 30
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