TPO54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
On one side, some people believe that, art is the most subject among people, and the government should spend more money to improve it because we have use the art to send messages to the world. On the other side, some people make opposite points, and they believe sport is more important than art, and the government should spend money to support olympic teams to sompite with world. I firmly assert the first point carries high weitgh because I think olympic teams do not have a high level. I use following reasons to support my position.
For the begginig, in think sport is a bigest bussines in the world, and people who attend in sport teams just think about earning money, and in their opinion, playing in olampic teams is a good job for them. Unfortunatelly, sometimes I see if the government does not pay much money to coaches, they leave their team because they have a better opportunety in another team. In addition, some good players expect much money, and if the team can not support them, they will attend another team. This behavior botthers me because I believe that, it is not a faithful behavior, and they should have a friendly behavior.
Additionally, in my opinion, people who attend in olampic teams, do not have a health competiton. they do not respect each other, and have a bad behavior toward other players. I can not underestand, sometimes when videos are speared on the net, I get upsed because in most videos they an argument with each other, they shout at each other, and fight, even somethimes I see during the game they hit each other because they can not see another team become win. Actually, the government should spend money for learning them to have a health competition.
As a result, art is more important than sports, and the government should spend more money to support it because with art you can show your emotion, and become creative, also send messages to the world to help people for solving problems in the world. Were I in charge, I would pay attention to arts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...teams, do not have a health competiton. they do not respect each other, and have a b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, so, even so, i think, in addition, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77464788732 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40831067874 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450704225352 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.593583856 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.071428571 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222349982949 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976065625333 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994249324764 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167589311968 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108857821647 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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