TPO45
Today, one the most important things that we should careful about it, is making decisions. making a good decision plays a crucial and decisive role in every person's life. In my point of view, recently, young people have become independented, and have made decisions on their own. this essay will discuss two reasons.
First, of course life has become difficult because is changing day by day, so in this case, making decisions has become challenging too. In this rapidly changing world, we should amend and adapt our self with this circumstance. Unfortunately, our parents are retired, they do have more communications like before, they do not have new friends, they cannot adjust to this world like young people. children go to school, surf the net, read new books, have connection with some people who have different aspect of view and talk with their teachers or advisers. As a result, they have ability to make decisions better than their parents. For instance, when I wanted to take a toefl exam, when I talked to my mother, she had some typical information about toefl because she had taken this exam sixty years ago. Therefore, she did not know about some changes that had happened since last year.
Second, in the past, life was easier than know. most young people wanted to become doctor, but recently the demands of society has changed. we have a huge number of doctor in our country without a decent job for them. In addition, teachers encourage students to follow their interest major, so my father cannot help me very well because when he was a student, the country needed doctor, but now the country needs painter, teacher, chef or some sort of things. In my point of view, young people prefer making decisions by themselves, and absolutely have strong ability to do it.
Although, some people believe that, young people are supported by parents to make decisions, in my opinion, children have become independed and make decisions by themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Making
... careful about it, is making decisions. making a good decision plays a crucial and dec...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ys a crucial and decisive role in every persons life. In my point of view, recently, yo...
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Suggestion: This
..., and have made decisions on their own. this essay will discuss two reasons. Firs...
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Suggestion: Children
...adjust to this world like young people. children go to school, surf the net, read new bo...
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Suggestion: Most
...in the past, life was easier than know. most young people wanted to become doctor, b...
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Suggestion: We
...tly the demands of society has changed. we have a huge number of doctor in our cou...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'needs'' or 'need's'?
Suggestion: needs'; need's
...ntry needed doctor, but now the country needs painter, teacher, chef or some sort of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, of course, sort of, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93072289157 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4784068927 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578313253012 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9410099258 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2941176471 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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