TPO24-2: One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
The question of wheater work teenagers is a good idea or not, has always been a controversial topic among people with varied points of view. In one side, some people believes that, children have to work to get responsibility. others think is not good for them, and they have to just fococe on their ability and their home work. I firmly assert, the first point carries more weight because of independent and responsibility.
take a part-time job has more benefits for teenage children.
first of all, I think, if tennage children take some part-time jobs, they will grow like a independ person, they will care full about their life. Also, they will save money for a rainy days. In this situation, they can manage their future very well. In additon, if their parents died, they will be able to pass their live very well.
Second, life has become difficult, and all parents carry a huge responsibility for their children, and they support their children all the time. In this case, children try not to be care full about their life, and they will not have a good future , and they will have some problems in their job or with their wife or housband. I think, responsibility is a important subject for avery person, and we can learn and improve it during our life. Six years ago, I had a boy friend, we loved each other, and we decided to marry. Unfortunatlly, he was not responsible, and most of the time talked with me on office, and did not complete tasks there. On day, while he was talking with me on the phone, his boss punished him, and after a weak he left his job. At that time, we need money, but he did not have responsibility, and he had expectation from his parents, so we broke up with each other because I could not talorate his behavior. I think, if he had take a job before, we wold have marry and have a good life.
All in all, I think these subject are too iportant, and we have to improve them. if I had a child, I would help he or she with taking a job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Others
...ren have to work to get responsibility. others think is not good for them, and they ha...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Take
...of independent and responsibility. take a part-time job has more benefits for t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...ore benefits for teenage children. first of all, I think, if tennage children ta...
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Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ome part-time jobs, they will grow like a independ person, they will care full ab...
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Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'day'?
Suggestion: day
... Also, they will save money for a rainy days. In this situation, they can manage the...
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Line 13, column 247, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...fe, and they will not have a good future , and they will have some problems in the...
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Line 13, column 355, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...or housband. I think, responsibility is a important subject for avery person, and...
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Line 13, column 950, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...lorate his behavior. I think, if he had take a job before, we wold have marry and ha...
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Line 13, column 950, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...lorate his behavior. I think, if he had take a job before, we wold have marry and ha...
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Line 13, column 982, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'married'.
Suggestion: married
... he had take a job before, we wold have marry and have a good life. All in all, ...
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Line 17, column 82, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... iportant, and we have to improve them. if I had a child, I would help he or she w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, while, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43989071038 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47207901005 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51912568306 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.86738351254 696% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9916533436 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5263157895 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57894736842 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262985519237 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928569848338 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873408120179 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183476069749 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.097229870789 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.